Dark Thoughts

eyes as bright and clear as summer sky

but with darkness the depth of night

with smiles

and pointed words

so clearly

and carefully

moving his quarry into the direction

of what he wants

and never guessing

never breathing

a thought

of anyone

but himself.

 

Reviews

[Tony Hwilka]

Well written and you sumed it all in a very tight poem. Good writing

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[bluessadmood]

yes some men are like that ,they show all that is bright and nice and hiding lots of darkness inside ,i know it sounds fearful ,yes!!!,love the way you it...

[Anima Inspired]

Yes...sadly this is something that happens often...selfishness. I love the way that you write this...so decidedly passionate and yet somewhat disconnected at the same time.

In terms of form...the first two lines are a little off putting in that there are extra words that I think could be trimmed out, but from that point forward it was great. Nicely written...

[Heretic]

Dark Thoughts. An appropriate title. Impure thought, as well, if I am translating this poem correctly. It refers to the ulterior motive a man has at a bar (or location of your choice) when speaking with a lady. Sadly, a lot of men do have forked tongues, saying one thing but meaning another.

Well written and a good read. Glad I had a chance to read this. I love your style of writing.

[Luther]

wow. that is beautifully written. really really nice. it's the kind of poetry i love to read. very well written. well done. george xxx

[Regis Auffray]

I appreciate this kind of poetry. It's very much like my style of writing. Thanks for sharing. Love and best wishes,

Regis

[Mistral Bilgera]

brief yet effective in putting the message across. Let us not be deceived with all those falsities people (not only men) has. good writing!! :)

[Katrina]

i love this. just enough for a brief outline, but descriptive enough that it's like looking at someones face in the dark -- you get a general sense but from eye to eye it leaves room for interpretation (sidenote: i actually had to google how to spell interpretation, but it's two am!)

[Pointblank]

So many men....So many that won't admit it. Very well done. Dark Thoughts, we all have them. It just seems more obvious in men to the more experienced woman.