Trouble Me

 

I have worries

but I worry that if I speak them

you won't hear

worse is when you only take fragments of what I say

and reshape them into things

that never came from my mouth

 

Trouble me

just a few words

to take my breath

trouble me

just a kindness

 

alone

the world is a dark place

and full of cutting edges

 

trouble me, trouble you

just to make the smallest of soft spots

upon which to fall.

 

Reviews

[Jarrett]

"Alone, the world is a dark place, and full of cutting edges,"
I love that line; so true that it could very well have been taken from the script of my own life.
Lovely.

[Dani California]

"you won't hear
worse is when you only take fragments of what I say
and reshape them into things
that never came from my mouth"


Although putting words in my mouth is.. annoying.. it's much better to know that you are at least listening to me, than to ignore me completely. Wow! Yes, this is true I believe. Because not listening shows lack of interest. And that hurts. Twisting words just shows ... well, could be a lot of things ..lol... but it does show that that person at least cares enough to twist them!

Your last stanza is my favorite. Brilliant...

Great work!!

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Mutual caring and understanding is something we all seek and hope to find with the right person. As I read your lines, I felt as if I were peering into a hesitant mind and wanting to say, "Go for it!" I hope the landing is soft. Nice work! Sharon

[Chahklat]

The beauty in this poem is how you orchestrate your words.
It is simple to create a catchy poem, but the true nature is
apparent in it's stitching. The arrangement makes me want to
read it over and over, how it becomes more narrow cutting
right to the heart.

[Adrian K. Smith]

If I am reading this right, and I may not be reading this right (having been up 19 hours after sleeping for 2); but I am wondering if this is a case of looking for two things - the first is the simpler, just to listen - the second, perhaps more complicated and difficult for most - to share; that they are there - and they are willing to share. I keep fighting to get Natalie out of my head - lol, now that song is stuck there....