Can't You See You're Blind?

i've failed you...

Hey you! Yeah you!

Look down on your hands

You’re blind! Aren’t you?

Can’t you see what they’ve planned?

 

I can’t believe you just shook your head

Look down again! Are your eyes dead?

Are you really telling me you can’t see the cuffs?

Are you really telling me you’ve not had enough?

 

Oh god, I’m too late. They’ve washed your brain.

You’ve hurt so much, you forgot the pain.

Come with me now! I’ll set you free

No, don’t walk away, please trust me!

 

They’re going to hurt you more

 They mean harm!

Your hands are soar

You have a bleeding arm

 

No please, not again, don’t walk away!

Say some thing please! Do you remember your name?

Curse them all, they’ve made you their machine

I hate them all! They won’t take me!

 

Touch my hand, look into my eyes

Restore my faith in humanity, and open your eyes

Don’t you miss the smell of trees?

Don’t you want to break free?

 

I’m crying so hard, I don’t want you to die

Please, can’t you see your hands are tied?

Did you hear that? Someone’s coming! Hide!

 Come with me, where there are no rules to abide!

COME BACK HERE! WHAT ARE YOU DOING?

THEY’LL KILL YOU! ARE YOU OUT OF YOUR MIND?

oh my… they killed you, and it’s all my fault

I came too late, I didn’t revolt

At least you escaped, even if it’s by death

It’s just sad you were blind on your last breath

 

There’s only one thing left to do

Hey you, yeah you

I’ll meet you up there too…

Author's Note

Feel free to comment!

Reviews

[Tania]

love this !!!!!!!!!!!!!1 beautiful

[Lenah Mehzabin]

I m totally ur fan now ..poems u write r my usual kind of choice but the style u wrote it ..i really felt somthing inside ,i felt that girl , i felt like i m screaming .. when i read it it was like i m watching everything just like a movie .. nd the starting line is awesome > Hey you ,yeah you ! .. Fantastic job. keep it up :)

[Lorena]

Thank you soo much!! haha i'm so happy that the message of the poem was delivered and that you enjoyed it! i appreciate your awesome comment :D

[Lenah Mehzabin]

my pleasure :) ..nd actually ur poem is awesome !

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Special style, but it is very compelling. I can picture you yelling out of fear and with every stanza louder and louder. It's a shame you can't recite poems here, must be something special with this poem. Very good. :) Rudi

[Lorena]

Thanks a lot for commenting! Yes it is how i imagine it.

[Chloe Grant]

I love how it's written, it's like nothing I've ever read before. It's gorgeous and awesome. It's interesting. Terrific job.

[Laura Lynn]

ok, this review got me to read this, it really is quite a twisted adventure here.

[Lorena]

Thank you so much!! You don't know how much I appreciate it :D

[closed]

i like the way this is written, it's different. you seem like a unique writer

[Lorena]

Your kind words are encouraging! Thank you so much

[katnisscat]

It has personality. I like it.

[Lorena]

Im really glad you did! Thanks for the awesome comment

[Solitary_Streets]

This is great! I love the rhyming through the whole piece, I love the whole story, great job

[Lorena]

Gee, thanks a lot. Haha I kind of thought the rhyming was a little out of place but thanks for that! :D