Childhood

 

I took my mom out for a walk, this afternoon

it’s been a while since those strides around the block

As a child we walked every day

But time moved fast, and we grew apart

Today, we passed the house

That, that old man used to live in

He sat in his porch, drinking tea

And I always waved at him in excitement

As he waved back

We passed the backyard on the corner

Where that dog used to roam

He barked as we walked by

And I laughed, wanting to pet him

We walked amongst the helicopter leaves

That we used to throw in the air

As it propelled to the ground.

We passed the houses of old friends and new

Reminiscing on the past that we shared together

She smiled just to be there with me

And I realized on this walk

That with more support and love

Maybe she will understand

And we could spend more time with nature

on these beautiful days

Like we did in the past

when I was a child

Reviews

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

I like this piece though it doesn't seem to flow well together but it's still a great write! I felt as if i were watching the two going on a walk... Imagining the child and then the adult... Great job!

[Nik Dendera]

Beautiful piece.
It really has an atmosphere of its own and such wonderful imagery created with a great use of language.
The plot is simple, yet you keep it interesting and I have to say, I haven't read anything that has made me stop and think for a while!
Great work!

[Yaooooooo]

Overall a good read, keep up the good work and feel free to send me a request when ever..
One!

[Frances O'Neill]

This is a nice prose piece. I like it's very direct and simple form.

[Danielle Teresa]

She smiled just to be there with me
And I realized on this walk
That with more support and love
Maybe she will understand

hmmm understand what i wonder....

nice work...