Thoughts in moments

confused in grey, sad poems, deep times

What can a jest of life cause in a person?

can the wind comfort a lonely sit?

If a company on none can suffice an idea of peace,

then when do others cause the distraction of comfort?

Tears know no purpose in this transaction lacking in novelties.

"A journey here by slow means of transportation."

  Every clock strikes grey,

after the light of rain gives way.

Thoughts of past gain futures weight.

The voice quotes "beat" in every decaying reaction of experienced moments.

 So what's the deal?

If the one who has said these moments,

will never speak my good friend Neil?

 

Reviews

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful work. You make the emotion come alive.

[emmajoygreen]

Your words still hold an explicit presence even after their ten year display, sir.

'If a company on none can suffice an idea of peace,
then when do others cause the distraction of comfort?
Tears know no purpose in this transaction lacking in novelties.
"A journey here by slow means of transportation."

However, may I ask if, in the first line above, the first line is supposed to be OR or ONI ?

[Steven]

i dont understand the or or oni thing.

[emmajoygreen]

oops typo.. I should have typed correctly, Or or On - in other words I was asking if you had meant one or the other?!

[Steven]

ohhhh, ok. so i have this terrible ability for nothing to flow right. i meant for it to be "on" suggesting two different things; one a company of another person.
two. the general professional business company.
i sort of right in literal and symbolic meanings at once. to try and achieve two forms of thought. this is probably why my teachers made fun of me so much of others.

if a company on none can suffice an idea of peace= if you dont work for a company and have no friends. can give a concept quite and no responsibility.

then when do others cause the distraction of comfort= no one to judge you on your choices.
tears know no purpose in this transaction lacking novelties= confused when you try to remember why you bought the things you have.
a journey here by slow means of transportation=the mental conclusion and its gradual conclusion, not wanting to grease the wheels.

i apologize if this is a terrible explanation.

[emmajoygreen]

Not at all terrible but kindly and fully explained, sir, Thank you for explaining and clarifying. Honesty, candour etc' is always welcome.

[Sami Khalil]

"Every clock strikes grey,
after the light of rain gives way.
Thoughts of past gain futures weight."
I like those lines the most in this well penned write...:)

[Steven]

thank you for the comment. ill return the favor.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Rahul]

I couldn't get my time to read your story's but, i'll as soon i could.
This's nice "Thoughts of moment's"'re good to read and you attracted someone to float in your words. Your this below one stanza's quite interesting to read.
Tears know no purpose in this transaction lacking in novelties.
"A journey here by slow means of transportation."
Every clock strikes grey,
after the light of rain gives way.

but, hey, i want to say that in your this line" So what's the deal?", you should have to replace it with this line " So, what's a big deal ? Hope it'll work for you.