Everything

Glimmers and glimpses

I can see that spark in your eye

Fragments and fiction

Still enough to light my entire sky

If half of you is all I could have

It would be enough for me

It is more than having all of someone else

Because you are all I see

You are everything to me

Reviews

[Ria Benthil]

The most appealing line is "fragments and fiction" because it contains an ambiguous meaning for what the speaker sees in the lover's eyes. In a sense, you can only perceive small portions of the person through their eyes, and some of it can be deceit if you are talented not to betray your emotion. In a nutshell, I see the narrator as a person of altruistic devotion while the apple of her eye does not meet her half way. She appears to accept the man she is able to have a relationship with even if it is friendship; accepting his flaws.

Overall, I thought it was a playful poem within the structure, but it illustrates something that can lead to unpleasantness of love.

[the in between]

Loyal and love struck come to mind when i read this. :) "fragments and fiction" that stood out to me. I believe I feel the same with this line it's that its insane
"because you are all I see." Awesome short poem great job :)

[Deviant Works]

"If half of you is all I could have
It would be enough for me"

You have a very kind heart, a loving heart. To be willing to settle for only half when you obviously deserve so much more, to see the person who gives little as everything. Once again I can completely relate. Another lovely write from you, Lorame. You truly speak from my soul.

[Chris]

Pretty good poem. It flowed well and each line added to the theme well. You seem to have forgotten a word in one of the lines, though.

"If half of you is all could have"

Before the could--I'm guessing there was supposed to be an "I" there?

[Im His Daughter]

Very good... You are a great writer..

[Dreamer<3]

I like the style of the first 4 lines a lot. This is so relatable to me as well, which is probably why I like it so much. It could also be that it's so well written. Your choice(:

[Stacey Watts]

Very beautiful words. Expressed very nicely here. Flows well.

I remember when I thought I was in love, this is how I felt. :) May you live happily! Anyone is blessed to have this written for them.

[QC]

You are everything to me.

I like the idea you played with: that you still think that the one you love is everything even though he/she isn't all that put together. As usual, great job!

[Peter Thomas]

Good flow in my opinion. Overall a good poem.