Injustice

I don't understand how people seek revenge and yet it's called justice.

An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind

But it seems anger is the only voice of mankind

Adults tell us revenge won't make the pain go away

But they're the ones seeking blood at the end of the day.

 

I'm just a kid so what do I know, right?

But there are many times that I have felt spite

Like when my mum threw me in front of a car

I could've hit back and then laughed like ha!

 

Or like the time I lost my friends

I could've hurt them, but I tried to make amends

I'm the type of girl that keeps her word

Because, to me, vengeance is just absurd.

 

I believe in karma, the world is judge and jury

The sentence shouldn't be given by those filled with fury

If you still want revenge when they could be a brother, son or dad

Then in my eyes YOU are just as bad.

Reviews

[Harmony Lee]

I will try to keep this review relatively concise as I could write about this indefinitely... I relate to a dilemma of wanting to forgive and see amends while simultaneously experiencing such anger that makes doing so immensely difficult. I am curious as to how old you were when you wrote this and how your convictions have developed over time. Regardless, this is very insightful especially for someone so young.

[Aries1984]

The message is deep here and pierces through like a sword going through armor. I was brought up in the church by my parents. It's strange to be reading this as of the fact that is what I had on my mind while riding home from work this evening. I kept thinking about all this sadness in the world that's been happening, the recent terror attacks, the retaliation on Muslims and refugees, and just the whole mental instability of the world we live in with tragedies like that.

It all angers me as much as it pains me. I remember several times in my own life, after losing the only uncle I knew to a senseless act of violence several years ago, having my friends from church who knew about the tragedy constantly remind me of the passages in the Bible where it says to give up your anger and grudge to God and let Him deal with it. So today, with everything that's been going on in the world, I just kept thinking about some of the same things in your poem today while heading home from work. Why must some people feel the need to resort to vengeance is something that I think none of us will really understand to the full point.

[Trigorin]

Not bad. You have a good concept and you've expressed it fairly well. Your rhyme scheme is a little simple and you use maybe a few too many half-rhymes in the middle stanzas, but you still get your message across, so kudos to you there. The last line doesn't make much sense, though - is that 'they' supposed to be there?
Good work.