well I think you did a good job of making it original and unique. murder and red go well together.
I like the denial then the acceptance of the "Voice".
well done, Alex.
Wow. I love it. I see this as one person fighting with them self to come to terms with what they did. HOnestly I love this piece so soomuch. Good job c: c: and great idea with the italics and bolding it really got the point through.
It works, and I especially like the use of red. I like how there's more black at first and by the middle of the poem, the red starts to overpower the black. I'd add more red font to the last stanza, make it almost completely red, make the last two repeated lines completely red.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you. I considered adding more red to the ending of the poem, but I wasn't sure whether it woul.. read moreThank you. I considered adding more red to the ending of the poem, but I wasn't sure whether it would read well like that, so I greatly appreciate your input.
This seems interesting. Almost as if the person who is speaking (or thinking) is dealing with some sort of internal conflict with his conscience.
~~The coloring and italicizing is mainly what caused my thought~~ ^^
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Well, that was what I was mostly going for when I wrote it and did the colouring/italicizing, so tha.. read moreWell, that was what I was mostly going for when I wrote it and did the colouring/italicizing, so thank you.