Don't you go and re-write a re-write.

The idea that we should be perfect at any moment.

 

I don’t get the acceptance ‘I should see myself as is’

No foreword reword or working in my piece

No rethought or condition should exist, without, to tote

In my condition to the passage of my vision

That my life is in the shell of what is what is now, I never miss

That my never thinking instinct grabs the entirety, No question

Strangles the beasty’s in my quick witted laze and obsession

That the worldy wordings get it all in passing out, Blacking out

Traversing mindless trebuchets in the gunners plodding shat

To the massing masses of mundane eaters to words of truth, coming up

As these, the glimmering gore of my minds destructive shive

Just falling flat in the islanding lows of my quickest spit, this non-working

Running wild against to be against in some vague idea of what is

That no clarity I should be provided to provide my only thought, No quips

Rent free with no collections to due to myself

I sure do like this perfection in my unthinking shell.

Reviews

[Jerrica Benton]

this cannot be read simply to one's self, especially at 7:40 am.

nice assonance.

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

I sure do like this perfection in my unthinking shell

shell unthinking my in-perfection this I sure do like

great word play. I read it once and bowled up to re-read and re-enjoy...

some of my favorite words layed down plodding shat and spit...

brilliant 'never thinking instinct....'

in all sincerity this is a most fun interesting introspective piece...

although I do think that 'beasties' deserve ownership 'beasty's' might be best served rewrit but then I know this piece is beyond that.

bravo boyo...

[Hawksmoor]

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh F**K.

I'm gonna have to come back to this and read it again, get my thoughts together on it, before I make my opinions known.

Damnit. This is what it should feel like.

Readers shouldn't be hit over the head with points of view, but then again, they should be challenged to think sideways. Make the fuckers think, I always say, without trying.

This is what you've done with this piece.

I'm off to think.

LOL!!
S**T!

Hawksmoor...From The Bleed.