Rainstorm...

Don't think I've ever tried to write a cinquain before so I hope it's not too bad.

Cloud

Forbodes, Invites

Pouting, Screaming, Crying

Expelling all it's passions

Storm

 

Author's Note

Take it easy...

Reviews

[Anima Inspired]

I like the way that you take on the idea of a "storm"...most people go for "powerful", "strong", "dangerous", but you've gone for "pouting", "crying", and "screaming", which show a different side of things. I rather like looking at a storm as a very powerful child who is throwing a tantrum unknowing of the consequences. Great imagery...nicely done!

[Girlintheworld]

Congratulations on your win. I didn't even know what a Cinquain was until you read me this one over the phone! BRAVO!!!

[Michael X]

Nice job, the intent has a way of drawing the reader to ponder through imagery.
I like the emotional link as compared to rainclouds,
colorful, powerful and creative, thanks for sharing this gem.

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Your cinquain is magnificent. The descriptives are right on point and creatively woven together escalating the piece toward its conclusion --- storm. I think you did a great job considering it's your first one. Nice work.

[PianoandPage]

very nice. i haven't written in this style since i was 12. i love the subject and your choice of words with one slight suggestion

i would consider changing "screaming" to "shouting" as i am assuming you mean to imply thunder and screaming is sharp like lightning. it still works but it seemed a little out of place.

otherwise i loved loved loved your piece. makes me miss monsoon season.

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

I like it. I love experimentation, though I haven't been able to experiment as of late. I love how it's as if the cloud is throwing a fit, then the storm hits. Well done!

[Delilah Dunn]

To have never written a cinquain before, I believe your first attempt was very successful. I can hear, smell, feel, and see the storm coming. Great job!

[Rhine Wolf]

wow powerful, even in so few a words, i can smell the storm brewing.

Blessed be!
Fallon