The weight of water...

I feel insignificant.

Like a tiny weed in a field full of flowers.

I feel expendable.

Like a mere spark on the surface of the sun.

I feel frivolous.

Like a teardrop in the sea.

I feel intimidated.

Like a twig amongst a brush fire.

I feel diminutive.

Like a bird trapped inside the tantrum of a hurricane.

I feel small,

but only in your arms,

and only when you love me deeply,

and kiss me gently,

and hold me tightly,

and love me infinitely.

Then and only then do i feel overpowered...by love.
 

Author's Note

Again...bring it on-I've got thick skin.

Reviews

this poem goes from depressing to heartwarming in an instant, but not jarringly so. I'm cautious about suggesting anything in case I mess that up. In fact, either way I only have one suggestion:

"Like a mere spark on the surface of the sun."
"Like a bird trapped within the embers of the sunrise."

You mention the sun twice. I'd possibly change that second one to something similar to "Like a birds trapped under the canopy of a forest", but otherwise this one turned out well.

[Adrian K. Smith]

I have to say that I was pleasantly surprised by the twist this piece provided. While I am generally all dark and moody and what not, I can appreciate a good twist whether it goes from good to bad or bad to good. This had that perfect flow of oh woe is wee little me in big ol' bad world... and then like that sudden knee to groin, you take our breath away twisting around that sense of being so minuscule and placing it within the context of love... which makes most of us feel so itty bitty. Thank you for sharing this wonderful mind candy. :)

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

This was a truly beautiful piece. I love how you talk about how small you feel until you discuss your love for your other person, and then you feel "overpowered."
Really amazing job!

[Delilah Dunn]

Exquisitely written.
A simple review for a simply touching poem.