One long moment of unrequited love

I think having your love go unknown is pretty much universal... Enjoy! You better, 'cuz writing it hurt enough for the both of us...

I think of reaching forth to grab

What I know I shouldn’t

But I want it-but I shouldn’t

I watch her turn to listen to another, and her eyes are liquid fire

I think of reaching down to speak

What I know I shouldn’t

But I MUST- but I shouldn’t

I see her turn back, her hair like curly waves of an immense ocean

I think of grabbing her shoulder

Then think of the stretching in my stomach

And think of the building self-loathing

And think of the�"wait, she’s turning again!

She speaks, Oh! She speaks! Music!

I MUST tell her (is this love?) That I love her!

Wait-she’s looking at me!

Ithinkofsmilingthinkofwinkingthinkofwaving

She’s right there, go sit next to her! The moment’s passing!

Move! Say something!! SAY SOMETHING!

And her eyes pass

I think of trying to stop thinking

But I think I’m exhausted

Or maybe

Just more alone than ever

Author's Note

All advice is much appreciated

Reviews

[annie lee]

This blew me away. The stream of consciousness flow was so literal -- with the disjointed thoughts -- like darts at a dartboard as you watch her and think. This is no slow reasonable thought process; it is all our anxiety as we stand rooted to the ground and dying for a taste of water from a fountain too distant, too grand, maybe it isn't water after all, oh, but it looks refreshing, take the step. You nailed this one. And the title is perfect. Very impressive.

[Liban Jibril]

THANKS! You specified exactly what I liked about it, great review!