*I Know Why People Die [Song.]

Nother song for that CD! I think this one's perfect. I might even add a few stanzas.

 

I know why people die.

We work ourselves to death.

All that we do is cry.

We waste each and every breath.

 

First they push you right into their schools.

Shoved into them at a tender age.

We’re all part of God’s giant death pool.

Monkeys on display in a flesh cage.

 

I know why people die.

We work ourselves to death.

All that we do is cry.

We waste each and every breath.

 

History, math, so pointless to me.

I don’t get what you expect of me,

You think that you know what’s best for me?

You’re not saving me, just wrecking me.

 

I know why we can’t live.

In this world of steel rules.

I know why our hearts give.

They can’t take a beating this cruel.

 

I know why people die.

We work ourselves to death.

All that we do is cry.

Waste each and every breath.

 

Work yourself to death.

Squeeze out one last breath.

Earn just one more cent.

Before your strength is spent.

Reviews

[Mercury Mirrors]

youre both right im not attacking school even though i think they could work to make it a bit more geared to leading a productive life than just rote memorization.

I'll change some of it when I have the chance.

[Nik Dendera]

I'm not sure I agree with the review below. Age has nothing to do with this. I'm 24 and I completely agree with you! You do just work and work, nothing much ever comes of it-except paying your damn taxes, and in the end, you just die! Of course, the reference to school does ever so slightly give away your age, but if you were to replace it with something more universal, say going to work or such, I think it would have more appeal.

But sod it, this is your piece and you've done it in the way you know.

I like this. Slight edgy alt.rock mixed with metal. Well, that's how I read it. Pretty damn good! I'll be back to read more (not got too much time online)

[Shane Brooks]

you have a good style a couple of things things you can work on the english math class stuff really doesn't work with what your trying to say in the poem and also shows your age which can often lead to prejudice in judgment fair or not over all though a good piece you have good potential in your writing