*Let It Rain...

A song I wrote. The cold dude that I left is Don & the sweet down-tp-earth guy is Richie. It may not have flow on paper, but it works really well when I sing it :3.

 

Let it rain.

Let the sky cry with me.

I am sorry.

I’m not who you want me to be.

Your anger.

Hangs low over like these grey clouds.

My screams.

Of sorrow, like Thunder so loud.

 

Are you up there watching? Like the god you think you are?

Standing on top of the world smiling from afar?

At least I’m still human enough to remember to feel.

And when I tell you something you know that I’m for real.

But you still sit there, a cold & lonely deity.

One day your eyes will open & you will miss me.

But you’re already too late...Because...

 

I have found.

Someone warm & loving to hold.

And he’s not.

A gilded lie embroidered in gold.

He is real.
When he says he loves me I know it’s true.

There’s nothing for me he wouldn’t do.

He’s the opposite of you...

 

And when the pain of memories of you finally fades away.

I can take his hand & walk away from this heartbreak hurricane.

The sun will shine down on us, we’ll be together every day.

He’s so shy & down to Earth, while you’re picky & vain.

I hope you stop being bitter someday & go back to how you were.

But I won’t be there by your side to help, you’ll have to lean on her.

I hope she’s around, I know I won’t be, but for now...

 

Let it rain.

Let the sky cry with me.

I am sorry.

I’m not who you want me to be.

Your anger.

Hangs low over like these grey clouds.

My screams.

Of sorrow, like Thunder so loud.

Reviews

[Ravenskald]

Interesting idea for a lyric, cataloguing the move from an unrequited love where the author is ignored to finding happiness in finding someone who really cares. I'm not sure it all scans, but it would depend on what you have as a musical backdrop as to whether it works or not :)
I love these lines
"And he's not.
A gilded lie embroidered in gold.
He is real."

A nice piece of work

[J.Black]

This was so refreshing to read!

[Cassidy Mask]

I really liked this piece, the pattern in the verses, and the way it goes back to the beginning
You've done a great job

[Dalaina Renee]

Wow, well written. I enjoyed reading it!