My Foolish Heart.

=/ Unfinished Song.

Let me dig out my heart & bury it so I can think clearly

Let me hide it away, rest my soul. I’m so weary.

It’s been dragging my spirits down, oh so far.

Happiness, a prick of light like a cold, distant star.

 

I’m holding my beating, pulsing burden out to you

Take it, just please take it, I don’t care what you do!

Take it & run with it till we’re worlds apart.

The bane of my existence, my foolish heart.

 

Let it stop beating, last of my sanity retreating

Let me stop needing you let me stop greeting.

I'm unraveling, I'm coming undone at the seams

The walls of my cell are all that stifle my screams.

 

And still…

 

I’m holding my beating, pulsing burden out to you

Take it, just please take it, I don’t care what you do!

Take it & run with it till we’re worlds apart.

The bane of my existence, my foolish heart

 

 

Reviews

[+xDrunkenFairytalex+]

I read this poem.. at the best time possible.. It fits this moment SO well.
.... Thank you. "Everything happens for a reason."

[Cardinal Robin]

Let it stop beating, my last sanity retreating

How about "Let it stop beating, lost my sanity retreating..."
it's easier to sing...

My own embrace is all that secures my seams

How about, "My own embrace is all that seams secure"

lyrical, mystical

and the rest is awesome, gripping, variety, reminds me of

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=55nTwg5NIPM

really good start! Keep it going!

[Nikkikid48]

Lovely...my favorite part is ...a prick of light like a cold distant star....im holding my beating pulsing burden out to you...very nice...I feel the point of this poem....and even though its dark like a lot of teen poetry i feel like theres a clear difference in your maturity and word choice....its deeper than most teen poetry....i love it :)