My Name Is Heartbreak

This is something I wrote while waiting for Richie to finish chores & get back to me. I've wanted to write something like it for a long time. Enjoy.

My name is Heartbreak.

I am neither male or female.

I am the personified incarnation,

Of heart wounds fresh & stale.

 

Each & every breakup gives me strength.

Every death of a loved one gives me new life.

I am the product of your suffering,

The spirits of misery & strife.

 

I don’t remember how I came to be,

Or how I was born to this place.

I have no eyes, but I can see.

I have no mouth, no nose, no face.

 

I don’t even have a solid form.

I’m the shadows you think you see,

When tears blur your vision, the fuzzy shapes.

I’m no one’s friend. I’m your worst fear, an enemy.

Reviews

[Fear Corrupts!]

Well done. creative. What a unique concept? Heartbrake no being a happening, but being a creature...sinister. Regards.

[Kriss]

this is simply amazing. I'm adding it to me library! your the first one on there! so knwo that you did a fantastic job!

♥Kriss

[Damian Alan Gray]

This is a great write in that it expresses such a vast and untouchable emotion, and you're spot on with that expression. You could tighten this up by way of omitting some of the wording, however. If you did that, you'd have a hit on your hands. Please don't take that as a slant against the poem itself, it's great as it is. I'm just of the opinion that the expressionism could be done in fewer words without losing any of the descriptiveness of that expression. By doing this, the poem may have even more impact upon the reader than it already does.

Overall, really nice work.

[Ailyn]

As someone who's felt that exact feeling quite recently, I understand where this is coming from. I like it. You've managed to take an intangible feeling and give it shape and substance. Good job!