The Dragon

Turned into something completely different than I expected...

No one knows just why she cries,

A knot in her stomach tightens and ties,

The wings of an angel soar and she flies,

The girl is certain this is how she survives,

No help from others but ways to cause pain,

Sit back, relax, to watch her energy drain,

Life as she knows it is a never-ending game,

Her enemy The Dragon just waiting to be slain,

A pound on the door, a creak in the floor,

In darkness she sits, the light is no more,

Gunshots, bleeding, and yelling galore,

Outward she peaks through the crack in the door,

Familiar scene of a dislocated shoulder,

A daughters eyes growing older and older,

When will it be over?

Please let Daddy be sober

No one knows just why she cries,

A knot in her stomach tightens and ties,

Footsteps come closer, she hurries and hides,

Tonight is the night, she crumbles and dies

Reviews

[Rob Santana]

One deep poem. Very strong and powerful. Job well done.

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loved it so much I felt like hiding took a lot for me to finish

[Distant horizons]

Beautifully written.

[Greg Close]

That hurt to read, which means you did it right. You've chosen your words and your images very carefully, and it shows. Good job! One suggestion - in the second to last stanza, try replacing "Please let Daddy become sober" with "Please let Daddy be sober" as I think it fits better in the rhythm scheme. There is a slight difference in strict meaning, but hey - that's why they call it poetic license!? ;)

[0_o Abbie]

I love love love this one. I think it's your best yet!

[Arabdha]

amazing writing..you can feel almost the pain of the girl in the poem.."No one knows just why she cries,
A knot in her stomach tightens and ties"..

[Chelsea]

whoa. that was fantastic.

[Steven Cetta]

I felt that, it hurt. Wonderfully written.