Warped

I don't even know if I make sense anymore.

I will not give in to your abduction
But I'll surround myself
In sweet self destruction

Whether it be in body or mind
A way to escape
I always will find

Because the thoughts run wild
While memories seep from the walls
The anger of an unborn child

I will not give in to your abduction
But I'll surround myself
In sweet self destruction

Reviews

[B-poet]

I felt the predator when I read this. Just having a way to self destruct just in case life gets to stupid beyond the realm of common sense. Great job here. A favorable read. :)

[Hayley]

It does sound like a song to me with the repetition and the central theme. However, your rhymes do seem a bit forced. Maybe try some free verse and you will get your point across more. Keep writing!

[Rob Santana]

Reads like some lyrics, pretty good.

[junaid altaf]

the presence of yours can be found in this.......
good work

[CHRIS ANDES]

the repetition of the 1st stanza is justified
since it creates an emotional emphasis of the poem
=]

[Jordan's Back]

This is a profound write, it caught my eyes in the feed and when I opened it I saw allot of my inner struggles I have had over the years. This poem is very deep and the thing to remember is that sweet self destruction, it total helplessness. Excellent write