{peculiar perspective}

{peculiar perspective}

A Poem by living lavender
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poetically lost my mind

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the perfectly punctual prosperous porcupine
picked away at polluted flower planes along his pantry
wanting to purchase pastries with pennies from ponies
{but they denied him ever so}

such purple peonies were planted with promise
yet paper thin pickle pies were promptly forgotten
when panthers pranced passionately amongst them
{still they denied me a show}

many panicked people run parallel to a precious life
passing pomegranates after pious power
with pompous patience prickling their prowess
{they are denied what they know}

© 2024 living lavender


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Densely populated with wonder and curious scenery, this poem demands a reader to take their time to digest what each line has to offer. It reads like a lost track on PATD's album Pretty. Odd., which is meant as a compliment from me as I love that album (they had a much more sophisticated lyricist back then). Very enjoyable read.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

i love PATD ~ i am so flattered :)
"densely populated with wonder" has to be the most poetic.. read more



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Densely populated with wonder and curious scenery, this poem demands a reader to take their time to digest what each line has to offer. It reads like a lost track on PATD's album Pretty. Odd., which is meant as a compliment from me as I love that album (they had a much more sophisticated lyricist back then). Very enjoyable read.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

i love PATD ~ i am so flattered :)
"densely populated with wonder" has to be the most poetic.. read more
You are so talented!
This is very unique. I don't believe I will ever be able to write like this...my mind is one directional. Lol
I love this!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

welcome to my mind ~ oops. sorry. you can never leave now. lol
but seriously thank you :) you.. read more
FlaLover

9 Months Ago

I truly enjoy your work!
living lavender

9 Months Ago

thank you for your kindness as always babe :]
Superb use of alliteration and fun poem.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

thank you :] i am glad you enjoyed it.
A wonderfully clever and amusing poem. Would be ideal for small children to learn, sing and dance to, Imagine doing a series of them.. you'd be famous in no time, living lavender.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

thank you beautiful :)
you may have struck an idea there ~ my insanity knows no bounds. so th.. read more
Well, that is positively the most prolific and prolonged alliteration I have seen in a long time. You are an expert, and what a tongue twister too. Now I need to work on the meaning, living lavender. Porcupines now aren’t they a bit prickly?

Chris

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

thank you for such kind words as always.
why yes. they positively are ;)
Alliteration is an effective device, but overdone it detracts from the poem. Of course, when meant for comedic effect, which I think was your intent, there are no restrictions.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

true and true :)
this one felt good to write without boundaries.
I always love it when people lose their minds. It's usually the best way to truly get to know someone. For good or bad

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

i agree with this.
just don't poke the bear when it believe it's a tiger.
This one is promising. : ) Fun poetry and quite creative. The Ps have it. : )

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

hahaha thank you for your review and i just saw you purple promising poem too!! i knew i could have .. read more
I have yet to make out the shape of your poem, but surely I will. Because though the scenery's abstract, I caught glimpses of familiar feelings I have once adorned in your poem. Perhaps, I will understand one day, if someone allows me. Thank you for sharing your work, author living lavender, I wish you a nice day.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

living lavender

9 Months Ago

i will give you a hint my friend:
when reading this playful piece of a poem ~ simply read th.. read more

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