Barely Breathing

There's pain in the healing

the cuts and the bleeding,

with a broken heart I'm living

but still I'm barely breathing. 

No time can fix my heart

and your lies have done their part,

the words that made me smile

now tear my world apart.

And I want to hold you close

hold that love I loved the most,

but you destroyed the man I used to be

and left me with the ghost.

And though there's pain in healing

the endless cuts and bleeding,

with a broken heart I'm living

my life will not stop breathing.

Author's Note

Wrote this on the 15 minute bus ride home. I know its not great but I just had to get it off my chest.

Reviews

[Luciole]

You're kidding right? It is definitely great! It's short and sweet and heartbreaking. It makes me feel something and that's what is important in a poem. This was amazing :)

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

Well written, even if it's not the best in your mind. However, in mine, it is wondrous. Heartfelt, and it has a great ending. I loved it.

[Winters_Lost_Walk]

Emotional and well-felt. Nice write =)

[Calypso]

Way better then I could do in 15 minutes. Good for you!

[Coyote Poetry]

I know the feeling of this poem. A broken heart need time and sometime great distance. You did well in your 15 minute ride home. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tainted Devotion]

Very relatable and deep. I am sorry that you have to go through things like this, although you are amazing when you do write things like this. Very nicely done.

[Desmund Tiny]

I can relate to this...... emotions flowing perfectly with each stanza...great write thanks for the RR.....

[Lily Mae]

Raw and intense and something I hope I don't ever have to experience again.. Well penned..x

[stars are far]

I loved it so much
mostly it is th best thing you ever wrote ..
thanks for your RR

[DreyaArt]

whoa relationship not doin so great there ty? you ok? if you really need to talk im here
Drey