Beneath These Ashen Stars

Lay your head upon my chest

and listen to my heart,

feel it beat with yours.

The soft touch 

blissful,

perfect,

and real.

Your fingers,

dance against my palm.

My head,

resting softly on your shoulder.

I look into my heart

and see your ice blue eyes,

looking deep into who I am. 

Thank you for caring

to break down my walls,

to see passed the mask I wear.

To you I give my trust

reaching out my open arms,

take me by the hand

beneath these ashen stars.

Reviews

[Becky C Strukamp]

A very beautiful poem with a powerful message. Loved it.

[DreyaArt]

awe :D thank you its so pretty :D

[Stormy Weather]

The message in this is so light and lovely, but kind of heavy and deep underneath. Great poem :3

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Lay your head on my chest.......blissful. My head on your shoulder, come and break down my walls. I give you my trust beneath these ashen stars........lovely!

[SinnerInspired]

Aw adorable& cute

[Alskar]

This was breathless and beautiful. As usual, your unique structure is your best feature. I'll accept this as a telling piece. The personal nature of the poem is good, although poetically this isn't anything new. But in terms of describing a beautiful summery love scene, this is good.

[Lily Mae]

This is great, and sweet and some yummy mixed in.. :) Well written and perfectly expressed emotion..xx