A New Day Rising (Eternal Amorous)

Stand atop the world with me

and take my broken heart,

heal the scars the past has left

to piece in back to part. 

Sit with me as skies crash down

like the waters from a fall,

I lay here now, incomplete

 but for you I'll give my all.

Reviews

[DreyaArt]

this still is one of my favorite poems, although now it makes me sad...

Touching and passionate, putting into words what many can't. Myself included. Hah ! Great poem.

[joshua deathdealer]

Nice write. Well written and powerful.

[Stormy Weather]

This is so sweet and vulnerable. :) I like it.

[DreyaArt]

thank you

[Rae]

Very nice. Keep writing!!

[Lily Mae]

This is short but very powerful.. I think it's one of my favorites...x

[AchingAlexandra]

It was short and sweet . Very nice . Wording is lovely , and the message is beautiful . Good work . (:

[Alskar]

I think this was a little too short, but I like that there's no frills and you're quite direct with your message about the speaker's love. It sounds almost post-apocalyptic, which makes it very interesting. However, nothing other than that stands out to me. There's some bland, overused images and word choice here, such as 'broken heart' and 'scars', which I gloss over because I'm tired of reading them. What I do like is the poem's ability to be extremely vast and grand in just eight lines, which isn't easy to do, so well done with that.

[Becky C Strukamp]

A breathtaking write. I loved it.