Erase the Grey Horizons

Incarcerated by my reveries

longing for the day,

incandescent solitude

keeps the dark away.

Excuse my silent heart

yearning for its voice,

open up my walls 

undying is its choice.

Dreaming my fair reveries 

reunite me with my heart,

erase the grey horizons 

yet don't tear me apart.

Reviews

[DreyaArt]

just taking a "stroll" down memory lane.

I loved the rhyming scheme you used. Very deep, dark, poweful, and moving. The descriptive vocabulary was not just an added bonus, but it concentrated on almost the entire poem, painting a clear picture in my mind as I read.

[DreyaArt]

haha now i know what this is about lol so sweet :P love it :)

[DreyaArt]

this sounds sad, are you sad?

[Becky C Strukamp]

Excellent poem

[Alskar]

I like the images you use here, but I do feel this piece is a bit directionless. It seemed to be a little style over substance. Was it about a dream? A nightmare? A distant love? A sense of impending doom? Perhaps you meant for this to be open to the reader. Also, as ever, not a fan of rhyming. It makes the poem sound too neat, especially with your poetry which is usually dealing with darker stuff. Your imagery is very good though, don't get me wrong, it's just without a premise I find it hard to place the imagery.

[joshua deathdealer]

Hey this is a great write. Well done.

[JugHead985]

as i dive into the portraits you paint, I find myself stopping in the reflections you cast. awesome writing. yet again!

[Lily Mae]

"Excuse my silent heart
yearning for its voice".

Excellent write.. I love it...xx

[OtherWorldWoman]

I love this piece. You have used some nice vocabulary and it flows very well. Are you doing alright?