A Broken Moment

My guitar lays in pieces, this wreckage unknown

painting a picture, iridescent, alone,

the clock on the wall, burned into time

the wild rain falls like a nursery rhyme.

The trees sway outside, out of control

the air from my lungs, taken below,

times sweet possession, walked to the sea

the string of my life, the ruin debris. 

Where are my friends, those sweet kindred souls

this calm blissful moment, to the ocean I go. 

Author's Note

A poem I wrote with 2 lists of words. One list being mine, the other Vin Rutilias.

Reviews

[Valentine]

Terific write.I liked it very much..valentine

[Brook Hughes]

Very descriptive and well written:) i love the first stanza... especially the last line. the wild rain falls like a nursery rhyme. Keep up the good work:)

[DreyaArt]

well written, almost whimsically sad. keep writing, :) you should challenge yourself sometime to do a really long poem or better yet, you should write a book...and finish it lol :) random i know, but your a good enough writer to challenge yourself. :) pay attention to the universe, it will tell you what you should write :) love you lots

[Daytonight]

I love how you utilize the imagery of a nursery rhyme in the first stanza. Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with the ending. The ocean can bring peace to the wild in spirit. A wild beginning with a very nice ending to the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Just Cat]

Wow... I really like the flow, the word choice and the feel to it.
I was sent this as a RR from a friend, and I'm pleased they sent me it. It's so beautifully done!

[alexis]

very easy to read.i like it a lot.
another amazing piece of art

[Dahlia Phoenix]

This poem is classic. I love how smooth and easy it is to read and yet it has that feel that pinches at your soul. Its quite brilliant really with the kind of description you give on each of the sectors of nature showing different emotions and its like an ocean that continues on. Especially the line, "times sweet possession, walked to the sea the string of my life, the ruin debris." Powerful.

[nevermindfan1991]

This was very great and interesting read. You are able to much in a few stanzas. Your poem was beautifully written with great imagery that causes me to feel a mix of different emotions. I enjoyed reading this, keep on writing!

[Layla Anne Massaro]

Very good imagery. Keep writing