Tears of No Concern

Some may find this disturbing to read. Not for the young. Like all my others, just a broken heart talking.

What the f**k is going on

with every f*****g day,

shadows kill whats left of life

to let our souls decay. 

Stabbed to trees, our broken hearts

drip blood beneath the night,

cleaved from chests, our lifeless corpse 

hang while flames burn bright. 

Twisted souls run under wood

on which these bodies sway,

laughing as their blood rains down

from chests where hearts astray.

Little kids are crying now 

as they watch their parents burn,

drops of flesh fall to the ground

like tears of no concern. 

Daddy daddy where'd you go

a boy calls from the smoke, 

limping through the red stained grass

beneath this burning oak. 

Drops of blood and melted skin

fall like autumns rain, 

black smoke blocks the moonlight glow

so darkness overcame. 

Reviews

[Alexis]

The imagery in this is very powerful and gruesome. I did find it a little disturbing, but the way that you put the thought together in the form of poetry was amazing. I liked the rhythm of the piece and the rhyming. This was very dark, but good. Well done.

[Joshua Donahue]

So dark and exposing. You definitely hit the bullseye with this writing! Excellent.

[Dewella~Vintella]

"Twisted souls run under wood
on which these bodies sway,
laughing as their blood rains down
from chests where hearts astray."

My favorite part, I cant really say way; Just one of those things that speak to you I guess. Wonderful job.

[Hello, Goodbye]

the point is precise and it hits its mark.

[Aifey Jayd]

This is done really really awesomely, even though it's dark. I don't think there's really anything else I can say. I haven't quite gotten past the dark imagery of it. Sorry. I liked it, though.

[StarryNights]

This is very dark imagery as I told you before, and it is really done very well. Most of this poem gives me the chills! The picture definitely suits the poem, especially the last stanza.

[stars are far]

this is so great and nice
keep goin like this :)

[Aimee]

These words paint an amazing, gruesome picture.
And I love it.

Nicely penned.

[Lily Mae]

You must have known this harsh truth to have written it so well and to have expressed the vivid hurt and anger.. The frustration of loss and pain.. Who knows why we all do what we do while we're here.. After the pain...hopefully a healing takes place and better, stronger doors of opportunity open...xx

[Rai]

I love the rhyme scheme, and the dark plot.