Beneath the Night

Body to body beneath the night

the arch of your back in the pale moon light,

these hands that brush your velvet thighs

will never let you feel goodbye.

One million lights crash into shore

we lay here on this white sand floor,

a kiss for every star we see

the crickets sing to our hearts so free.

But lets take it back for story's sake 

back when hell was all but fake,

when smiles came from razor blades

to give us scars that never fade.

Back when life was all but bright

like our hearts, the black of night,

tormented, abused, never loved

lost all faith in a world above.

But then one day I felt a pain

and from the dark a shadow came,

broke and bleeding from the wrist

my angel whom I once had kissed.

And time went on to sew our hearts

into one another's arms,

initials carved into our soul

healed the scars the past would hold.

Now we lay beneath the night

under stars and pale moon light,

peaceful sleep away from harm

knotted in each others arms. 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Valentine]

Love is so much more than self abuse..abusing ones self means help is desperately needed...mental health..Valentine

[Kelz]

Emotional, sensual, romantic, hopeful and dark all rolled into one. Excellent x

[Winters_Lost_Walk]

Kinda reminds me of a memory on the sand with someone who means the world..or meant I don't know. The love in this poem is flowing, just like it's words =] The reality, just like in stanzas 3 to 5 will always remain, but at least, your future found a way to fix you back =) I really love this stanza:

"And time went on to sew our hearts
into one another's arms,
initials carved into our soul
healed the scars the past would hold."

Because you can see the emotion especially in the part where you say "carved into our souls".

Thanks

[DreyaArt]

well written.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice story in this poem. I like how the ending came with a reunion and two people together holding on. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Dewella~Vintella]

Ahh, I loved it! I adore dark pieces like this, with a touch of sensuality and what not. Probably my favorite so far, I would like to say I had a verse I liked most, but after reading it again, I cant decide.

There is a flow to this entire piece, not once did it break or stray off track. Lots of emotions and visuals. Fantastic.

Vinny~

[Martina]

"when smiles came from razor blades
to give us scars that never fade"
That line absolutely hit me so hard. The poem starts out so harsh and angry yet becomes a beautiful story about healing the scars of our past. Even if the scars are visible they can become transient, eventually. Beautiful write.

[Rachel Renee]

"when smiles came from razor blades
to give us scars that never fade"
These lines hit me the most, as I can relate due to personal experience.
Your stanzas are consistent and has a beautiful rhythm as I read through it. The way you ended it was also consistent and even though everything remained the same: imagery, emotion, flow, etc; it was a perfect ending to this poem. I really did enjoy this.

[Liza]

sensual movements into emotion and delight, the imagery and feeling is whimsical and lovingly peaceful and warm

[Tainted Devotion]

This is my new favorite of yours. Very beautiful piece indeed. Wonderfully done. The rhyme was lovely and you were able to put images in my head so that I could imagine what was going on. I love how emotionally deep this poem is, and I could relate so much to this poem. You did a remarkable job. Just wonderful.