Seconds in Time

She loves me.. 

She loves me not..

These words repeat 

Like the click of the clock.

One second yes

another is no,

what can I do

if her heart doesn't know.

One second shes happy

two shes upset,

three seconds she'll love me

and four I'm regret.

Click

Click

Click...

Author's Note

Just thoughts in my head. Getting them out of there so they dont end up hurting me.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A old poem with a new twist. Would be nice if using a flower and counting could decide love. A entertaining poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Dewella~Vintella]

I loved the flow of this piece. Though it was short, it was packed with emotion and vivid visions. This reminds me of a piece I wrote not to long ago, using the same, He loves me, love me not repetition through the entirety of it.

Though, of course, my poetry doe snot compare to yours, as always. :P

Again, wonderful. ^^

Vinny~

[Alskar]

I like the evident time progression in the final stanza. The clock thing is a bit overused, though. Similarly, the words you rhyme with are overused. In terms of making a simple, strong point, the poem achieves this well.

[sadjgrey]

short and simple but i like it..you have some nice writings man

[Jibin]

A simply, very well written. Sometimes write down something from our heart will kicked out the pain. But somethings always hook up on our heart, something we couldn't forget always hurts a lot, and gives only pains through out. I could understand something bleeding here, itself....
:)

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The pangs of bipolar...
No, seriously, cool format. Well expressed truth!

I enjoyed reading it. Reminds me a lot of a couple of nice songs.

[DearSweetAgony]

This poem is very cool, simple and sweet I love it.

[Tainted Devotion]

Really liked the flow of this poem. I can really feel the hurt in this....hope you are well soon.....

[Sukriti Suki]

Crisp..nice...I went click click click...