Tears of Missing You (new song)

About my great grandfather. RIP.

(Intro)

(V1)

You used to shine so bright

like the brightest star at night,

you used to be my guide

to help me see the light.

(V2)

Now white walls surround you

darkness sadly true,

though no sun will touch your face

still forever I love you.

(C1)

So this will not be the end

your soul will carry on,

you are always here with me

in memory not gone.

You leave us small remains

and tears of missing you,

so Grandpa rest in peace

and remember I love you.

(Bridge)

(V3)

Another day's gone by

and time just seems to fly,

it seems like only yesterday

we hugged and said goodbye.

(V4)

Yet days go on forever

but you help me to endeavor,

through the pain of losing you

I miss you more than ever.

(Piano solo)

(C2)

So this will not be the end

your soul will carry on,

you are always here with me

in memory not gone.

You leave us small remains

and tears of missing you,

so Grandpa rest in peace

and remember I love you.

(V5) 

Please take my hand in yours

and let me know once more,

this will not be the end

even if our hearts are tore.

(V6)

You will not be forgotten

through memories carry on,

Grandpa heres for you

passed but never gone.

(C3)

So this will not be the end

your soul will carry on,

you are always here with me

in memory not gone.

You leave us small remains

and tears of missing you,

so Grandpa rest in peace

and remember I love you.

(Close)

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is so good.. i can't hear it but i can read it and the love you feel for your Grandpa is shining through each word. I thought of the song by Alan Jackson , i think it is called Sissy's Song.. I really like what you wrote for and about your Grandpa. I know how it is missing our loved ones.

Chloe

[.shalynn.009.]

It's a little hard to critique a song, especially since I can't actually hear it, so I won't do this the way I usually do. Although, in verse 5, the last line, you used "tore" which was incorrect. It should have been torn. You might have done it purposefully, because that way it rhymed better, but I know people take...poetic license in songs adn sometimes fudge the rhymes a little, so you could get away with using "torn". Other than that, I can't really nitpick a song. But it was quite heartfelt and sweet, a nice way to pay respects to your grandfather. Emotional and loving, and I would be interested to hear the actual song, since it's hard to get it across without the tune.

Very emotional. And yes it did bring a tear to my eye. Great job.

[Abbie]

so emotional great write :)


100/100

[Valentine]

Wonderful write for the way I am feeling today..My mom would have been 100 years old on Valentine's Day and you never stop missing them..Nice one for the griever,,Valentine

[RJM]

I love this!

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Magnificent, so touching and emotional... Amazing!

[Emily?]

I can honestly relate to this. My papi just recently passed away of cancer. I'm truly sorry about your grandfather. But sometimes, the best writing comes from the most devastating moments in life. Great Job.

[SarahCortland]

this is a great poem its good to express things through writing in the end it turns out beautiful and you expressed your feelings great job!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem to remember your Grandfather. Best way to honor someone is to remember them in word and way of life. I say so many things my Grandfather have taught me. Family told me I became him. That is a honor to be like a great man. Your Grandfather would be content with the poem.
Coyote