Hesitation Proclamation

There is some hesitation 

when you speak your proclamation,

of love that shows confusion

was this just a dreamed illusion.

We have such possibilities

not stopped by our inabilities,

we love with such intensity

not shunned from things not meant to be.

So don't let this end inferior 

for our love has grown superior,

I can't just wait nearby

so please don't say that last goodbye.

Author's Note

I think the last word in the last stanza is the biggest.

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Your words seem to speak of that place of confusion in love, wondering and wandering about. Still there is a longing to go on. Beautifully spoken!

[Alex W]

My type of rhyming scheme and a well thought out piece. Very good, I like this.

Love isn't my thing, but I can still appreciate this alot.

Well done :-)

[Krista]

Very well written. My poems don't usually rhyme but I liked how yours sounded honestly. Not much emotion but very well done.

[A.Lee]

This is really good. Excellent flow and rhythm. I agree with Not Your Typical Girl in that it could be a little stronger in the emotion/motivation department, but its still good as is. Nice work.

[MissWordSmith]

alright, i thought this was nice but could be better. i don't know how to explain though, so sorry for the sucky feedback!
i just feel like this sounded too monotonous. you have to make this piece a little more full of life and a little more motivating, because i feel that that was the intention behind the piece while you were writing.
sorry i couldn't be of a bigger help, I said all I could explain!
keep writing!

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

great rhyming scheme, enjoyable read

[DareToDream]

I love the last stanza, its very strong. great poem!

[Blue]

Great vocabulary and nice rhyme. It's a great poem! I really like how it gives deep feelings in the poem.

[Liza]

i enjoyed the author's intensity and refusal to hold back; fighting for his right to love in its deepest ways and perhaps the recipient may be shielding while lover is attempting to convince that the reality is better than a fantasy.

[Bette]

very heart felt, i think with some of the other things i have read by you i understand perfectly. well done