I Am A Broken Angel

I am a broken angel 

who died from a broken heart,

nobody could save me

after I fell apart.

What used to be so perfect

now gathers dust and grime,

what used to be unbreakable 

has broken down this time.

You used to be my everything

my every breath I took,

our love was like a fantasy 

like one you'd read in a book.

Tomorrow never came for us

tomorrow just brought pain,

it broke my heart and destroyed my life

my life is now invain.

I am a broken angel 

who died from a broken heart,

nobody could save me

after I fell apart. 

Reviews

[Stammers]

I love it, but I found some of your rhyming challenging, I'd try and move away from being so restricted, but all the same - some really good lines, I love the repeated 'I am a broken angel, who died from a broken heart' sounds timeless.

Also read the poem posted on your profile 'about me', that was good, the image of wrists ripping apart was very powerful

Keep writing

[Valentine]

Sounds like you are telling a part of my own life in this one..deeply sad write..lol and God bless..Valentine

[DareToDream]

beautiful

Powerful poem here. Feels like there is a strong undertow of meaning going on here. So much more to the story than what we are given. Great poem.

[Chelsea.]

A lot of emotion, and its incredible how you pack so much meaning into your poems, yet still keep the rhyming scheme without it seeming forced. Beautiful job.

[Mistaken]

Wow this is amazing. =] I love how this flow is for this piece. This is simply beautiful!

my favorite stanzas are the last two...they go together so perfect..as does the rest but those stick out the most for me.

Keep writing!

[Undying Glory]

wow. simply wow. this poem just blew me away. i just love this poem. awesome work man

[Tainted Devotion]

This would make a very good song actually. It is very saddening, but quite a lovely poem all the same. Heartbreak is a very difficult thing to go through no doubt. But with time, healing will come. All in all just a very touching poem. Wonderfully done.

[Lexi =]]

Sad but great as usual. Your poems are great!!
Good Job[:

[Keevan]

very moving. i liked this one a lot. you have a lot of potential as a writer. well done :)