Seeing Through Blind Eyes

I didn't know who was talking to me at first until I read her poems and bio. It was the one who I'v been missing and loving with my whole heart.

Today I saw 

how blind I am,

when you stood right there

and I moved no hand.

Your words were clear 

but I did not see,

that it was you 

just wanting me.

Then my eyes were opened

and I saw it was you,

my tears poured out

my heart broke new. 

I keep trying, and trying and trying

to hear your sweet soft voice,

but two people deny

our whole hearted choice.

I will come back

to see your face,

in the spot we met

remember the place?

Reviews

[Kaelyn Shea]

this is so true. you could have the love of your life right in front of your face but you ignore them becuase you think you love someone else. this is sucha good way of putting it. very emotional great job!

[Theresa]

You never notice what is right in front of you so very true. I actually like how you end it. I would just put a question mark instead of a period. It leaves the reader wanting to know the place kind of gives the reader the opportunity to form their own ideas. Nicely done.

[Erin_is_peace]

This is really true. The people that love them are right ther in front of you but you're just realizing it. very well done. a lil cut off though like the other two said.

[Keevan]

I agree with Chelsea. It seemed a LITTLE cut short. But i really enjoyed reading this! Thanks for sending this read request! I love your poems!

[Chelsea.]

im not sure why, but i thought this was cut short a bit. All in all though, nice job.

[Missing Part]

:) I will always remember.

[Undying Glory]

really sweet work, methinks. great

[Fallen Angel]

i agree with bette, bittersweet, who ever this girl is you must really care for her..i love the last stanza.. all in all well written

[Lilly]

a very lovely write - i like the hopeful tone that is added in the end - it is obvious how special this person is and how much you care

[Abhinav]

a tinge of sadness,care of a loved one,hope.......a lovely write...flowed well,excellent stuff..i liked it!