When I Close My Eyes

Every time I close my eyes

your voice is all I hear,

feeling your lips upon my neck 

fingertips across my ear. 

Our hearts beat as one 

with our hair entwined,

your skin soft as silk 

your chest on mine. 

Every time I close my eyes 

I feel my abs constrict,

feeling your nails dig in my back

you made me this addict. 

With your legs around my waist

I close my sweaty eyes,

and when they open, you are not there

cause we said our last goodbyes.

 

Author's Note

Not the best piece, didn't turn out the way I wanted.

Reviews

[Lost, n'MT]

I thought this was expressed beautifully, and I am stunned that you weren't content when you wrote this, and I wonder if you are all these years later. You captured the power and pain so well... Very relatable and enjoyable piece.

[Shannon]

This was very intense, held the reader in its grasp through each phenominal image filled line, good job

[Liza]

"addict" was the word that stood out for me
the withdrawls of physical pleasures
are not always easy to dispell

[biggle]

i really like it, very nice =)

[FireFly15]

I love this. Its so passionate. Beautiful :]

[Tears Forgotten]

This is really good.... It kinda reminds me of a song...

[Chelsea.]

ah well.
I still thought it was pretty good.

[Liz Alexander]

Just sharing one thought can turn out to be something great. It just in the eyes of the beholder

[Fallen Angel]

Good piece of writing, i really feel your emotions

[Anata]

not the best piece?
Seriously this is amazing!

You really portray your emotions, I felt so good reading the first three parts, and fell back from heaven reading the last.

Very nice!