The Black Ravine

My guitar rings empty

as the moon falls down,

with the sound of the darkness

and the touch of the rain.

No stars shine bright tonight

no sun to light my world,

what used to be so close 

now lingers far away.

A dark ravine below 

a black abyss of pain,

a knife lodged in my back

as I slowly fade away.

Into the nothing

into the black,

the sun wont shine tonight

oh how I want it back.

Reviews

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

i really love this. "Into the nothing Into the black, the sun wont shine tonight, oh how i want it back " this piece is excellent but that is my favorite stanza

[Felicity Winter]

This is amazing. I really enjoyed reading this.

[Sharkapillar]

I'm just going to assume that you don't actually feel like that, else I'd be pretty pizzed.
But, as usual, fantastically written. Perfect flow. :) ♥
~Blessed Be~

[Gregory H.]

Nice poem...I found it to be really dark...but I like dark...Great Job...100/100

[Bette]

great rhythm.:)

[Jane Doe]

awwwwwww,
it soo pretty

[Coyote Poetry]

A outstanding poem. So many powerful lines. I like the feel of darkness and I like the ending a lot. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Keevan]

very deep and emotional. i really like this poem.
Nice Write!