Psycho

I'M NOT CRAZY xD

I stare into the darkness

insomnia kicking in,

demons in the shadows

watching my everymove.

 

Forever to be paranoid

of the hands that grab my thoughts,

eyes that look down upon me

from dark corners of my world.

 

Voices echo in my head

voices not of mine,

screaming at me every night

telling me to end my life.

 

Shadows push me to my knees

hands pulling me further down,

hands that come up through the ground

from the darkest pits of hell.

 

I stare into the darkness

insomnia kicking in,

demons in the shadows

watching my everymove.

Reviews

[jacjac44]

this poem ROCKS!!!

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

I can relate to this... I*heart*the third stanza :)

[Shwee]

I like this! 8D Mostly because I relate to it. XD

The line "voices not of mine" may not be correct in a grammatical sense, but I find it much more whimsical than saying "voices in my head"... which is a line I probably would have used. ^_^;;

It's not very easy to make a poem work if there isn't that almighty 'pattern' to it; ABAB ABAC and all that. You make it work quite nicely here. The lights are on around me and just by reading this, I can see shadows shifting in the corners of my eyes, and I can already tell when I go to bed I'll find myself with the covers up to my chin.

Well done getting into the minds of many a night owl suffering from a hyperactive imagination! XD

[Rainey]

Honestly, I'm speechless.
So deep and dangerous.
Another great one :)

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

"watching my everymove." -- every move is two words.

"voices not of mine," --- either 'voices not mine' or 'voices that are not my own'


Ahh! I love it. At the end I was like 'that can't be it! I want more' which in other words means that I love it and it is a great poem. You really take the reader into a world that may not be normal or in our comfort zone, and as a writer, you do a great job of giving us the feelings that your speakers are feeling and/or going through.
This is also a good poem because your visiuals really put us in that world that the speaker is talking about. I, personally, almost feel like it is myself that is trying to fight off these shadows and losing.

[Chelsea.]

I liked this, and im not a very good free verse writer myself, but it seemed kind of off perhaps? To me, while reading it, some parts rhymed [ or could have rhymed ] while others did not. Regardless, it was a great poem :)

[deeps]

Each first line in each stanza are so powerful. I like the feeling behind what I read. Each line reads like Insomia happening. This is a wonderful write.

[Dana Kathryn]

Awesome write! I feel all your words,But not all reality's are harsh!! I am listening to The Cure right now :)

[Liz Alexander]

"demons in the shadows
watching my everymove."

My favorite lines of the poem. It is the fear

[Coyote Poetry]

I been in places where the fear of the unknown awaken the senses. The poem told a similar story with a feel of fear. A excellent poem.