My Inner Demon

I have no religious veiws so dont go rambling on bout god when you review please.

I can bath in the holy water

stand in the light of God,

follow in the steps of the diciples

and still end up in hell.

 

The demon in me is strong

controlling my every move,

killing those around me

till I have no one left to lose.

 

F*****g up my life

tearing my wrists apart,

smashing my hopes and dreams

until I'm six feet in my grave.

 

I had to feel cruel death

to see the meaning of life,

I had to hear the pain of many

to know I was the reason why.

 

My demon persists to hurt

to hurt the ones I love,

tearing them away from me

till I'm left stranded to live alone.

 

So I'll whisper to myself

and listen to the walls,

I'll live to die forever

for I am LivingDeath.

Author's Note

The story of my name.

Reviews

[VioletRose]

okay not gonna ramble on about god just gonna say i feel the hurt..pain and
Very nice write!!!!

[Impulse]

Amazing piece. You have excellent talent in portraying what you are trying to say. Nice job =]

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. I lived a wild and crazy life. Did some things to challenge the rules of life. I told my wife need to take me with her. I may go the wrong way. The demons kept me sane in this wild and insane world. I hope I make it to the Native American hunting ground so I can meet my father. I like the poem. Must live the good life. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Very strong and powerful emotion. I like the way you included your user name in the poem.

[Alz Alz]

Wow, i like this poem very much. Morbid and spooky... I love this ind of writing. The beginning it seemed kind of "calm" in a sense... But as the poem went on, I felt my heart racing a little more, like I was "running from something"... That kind of feeling. Very good piece of writing. Kept me intrigued throughout the entire piece! 100/100!

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow .... i like this very much.... i LOVE your talent so much !

[heido]

I loved how calm it began and than it feels as though you are held underwater. It becomes rough, aggressive, mean and self determining.
Well done.