My Inner Demon

I have no religious veiws so dont go rambling on bout god when you review please.

I can bath in the holy water

stand in the light of God,

follow in the steps of the diciples

and still end up in hell.

 

The demon in me is strong

controlling my every move,

killing those around me

till I have no one left to lose.

 

F*****g up my life

tearing my wrists apart,

smashing my hopes and dreams

until I'm six feet in my grave.

 

I had to feel cruel death

to see the meaning of life,

I had to hear the pain of many

to know I was the reason why.

 

My demon persists to hurt

to hurt the ones I love,

tearing them away from me

till I'm left stranded to live alone.

 

So I'll whisper to myself

and listen to the walls,

I'll live to die forever

for I am LivingDeath.

Author's Note

The story of my name.

Reviews

[Raven Radke]

this was a beautiful master piece it made me smile
which is awfully hard

[Jane Doe]

BEAAUUTIFUL Mas+er PieCe

[Lilly]

This is great - fourth stanza is my favourite

[Bullet Soul]

Amazing, once again! I was actually really amazed at how well I can relate to this poem. I think you are describing my own exact demon, here! You did such a great job writing this. So many emotions, and so much darkness. You capture the part of our souls that can truly be described as 'living death.' Great job! :D

[The Wave]

"I had to feel cruel death to see the meaning of life..."

i really like how you wrote this, very strong and intense language...
some great pieces of imagery..."tearing my wrists apart" definitely made me squirm...
i would comment on the first stanza but that would be for another time.
overall, it's a very strong piece, i like it,
good job

[Chelsea.]

This is a very good powerful poem. Flows very nicely.
Good Job :)

[*Evelen*]

Wow... it's such a powerful write here. So much emotions that filled the whole poem. Well done=)

[Felicity Winter]

Lots of emotions, Love it!!!

[Lexi =]]

Whoa. This is amazing. I really like it. I feel the emotions!(: