I Cry the Rain

I cry the rain that falls from skies

from tainted twisted messed up lies.

I have no heart to tear apart

you took it babe, you left your mark.

Now in bed, I drip blood red

from a bullet lodged in my head.

And now I say on this fateful day

never will I be okay.

So I cry the rain that falls from skies

from your tainted twisted messed up lies.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Charles]

Great litle poem about a metaphorical experience (I hope the bullet isn't literal). The rhyming is perfect and meter is consistent except for one slip (omit the you in the 6th line and meter improves without losing anything in meaning). Notice that I don't find the number of feet is a problem from line to line (eg 10 in the 7th line but only 7 in the 8th line), but the rhythm seems disrupted by the 'you.' Good writing. :-)

[The Wave]

very good

short but definitely leaves a lasting impression. love that your ending was also your beginning.

overall, its written well.. has a darkish vibe with your words but still very lovable.
good job.

[Picture of Poetry]

Wow, this is seriously amazing! Short and sweet! It's very darka and meaningful. I love the flow and the point behind it is good. It's touching and it's a great short poem! Perfect! :)

[Tears Forgotten]

This is beautiful and so unique.. It has darker meanings twisted together in one message.. AWESOME!

[Lexi =]]

aww great poem(:

[A Touch of Insanity:)]

Amazing :) I love this

[ebur™]

Very meaningful and sad, really deep. I really think you wrote this beautifully and I love how you started and ended the same way. Great write :)

[Sharkapillar]

Aww, tyler *hugs* your poetry makes me cry :'(
Beautifully structured, graphically exquisite, and emotionally powerful. Another amazing write.
♥
~Blessed Be

[bluessadmood]

yes i liked this..but that must be love..its a torture..
it can come with lies,little deceit here and there
those who dont have the heart for it should stay away
its not easy to love ,and impossible not to love
very difficult situation we have here,ha ha
and yes love is full of hurts and heartbreaks
that will leave a mess and scars that may take long to heal
lovely write..

[Theresa]

I'm assuming this is about the heartache love causes. Your pain is expressed in every line and I like how you ended it with the same two lines you started it with. Another amazing piece.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow this is amazing i love it