I Cry the Rain

I cry the rain that falls from skies

from tainted twisted messed up lies.

I have no heart to tear apart

you took it babe, you left your mark.

Now in bed, I drip blood red

from a bullet lodged in my head.

And now I say on this fateful day

never will I be okay.

So I cry the rain that falls from skies

from your tainted twisted messed up lies.

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Reviews

[Charles]

Great litle poem about a metaphorical experience (I hope the bullet isn't literal). The rhyming is perfect and meter is consistent except for one slip (omit the you in the 6th line and meter improves without losing anything in meaning). Notice that I don't find the number of feet is a problem from line to line (eg 10 in the 7th line but only 7 in the 8th line), but the rhythm seems disrupted by the 'you.' Good writing. :-)

[Sleeping Maiden]

wow. This is really good. I can relate well. Great poem full of imagery. Its short but makes a big impact on the reader. Though, I'm sorry you had to go through something so painful. A broken heart hurts like no other.. hopefully you will find another to take that pain away.
Amazing job in writing!!

[DreyaArt]

dude whats wrong with you? no more sunny skies? have you decided to walk down the black path again or what? not to be mean but geeze boy, maybe you should stop giving your heart away so easily, start lovin yourself first before you love anyone else.
Maybe then there wouldnt be so many heartbreaks.

[LadyBroken]

I swear - I Love You . All your poems I can relate too , and It really touches my heart . I have a feeling of depression and sadness - thats all I know . But you put my feeling into words . Now I know how I feel , and now I know someone else can relate , thank you .

[Anata]

hmmmm ... interresting read ...

You know it gets better when you stuff it all down ;) we all go through these things ... a heart can be broken a thousand times, never again to be fixed ....

Very nice read!

[Jane Doe]

beantifUl ILUVe I+ thx 4 the reView

[Ali_Avery~7]

amazing, capturing words! you've got a great way of putting a lot of emotion into a small amount of space. Loved this poem.

[Kayla_May]

i really like this.

[Taylor_Anne_xoxo]

i usually dont like rhyming poems but i love this one. it flows nicely. my favorite line was "i have no heart to tear apart, you took it babe, you left your mark"

[Lilly]

full of emotion - very beautiful - thanks for the read request

[Emily?]

This poem may be short, but it's such an incredible piece. It has so much emotion in there. When I first read this my heart popped a little. Then I read it again, and something about it makes me want to keep reading! Wicked job!=)