How The Broken Feel (Nobody Knows)

My first write i put up... Revised it and changed it up a bit. Tell me what you think.

Nobody knows the pain I feel

the wounds on my body are painfully real,

but the pain I feel i will not show

because nobody will care, so why should they know.

The cuts on my wrists are red and deep 

but the things you've said have made them bleed,

a simple I'm sorry cannot mend my heart

this depressing time will leave its mark.

I'm sorry for the grief i have brought 

but now you know I can't be bought,

and the pain I feel I will not show

for nobody will care, so why should they know.

Nobody will know the pain I feel 

and these wounds you've caused 

they will not heal.

for this is life and this is real....

This is how the broken feel.

Author's Note

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[Picture of Poetry]

I am a huge fan of depressing writes. This was extremely deep, dark, and meaningful. I like the flow of it and the rhyming was perfect. It's emotion was grand and as I read it, I felt as though I could feel the pain. I truly do love this poem. It's one of the greatest dark writes I've read. :)

[Color of the Iris]

I have to agree... "For this is life and this is real, this is how the broken feel."

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

This is really good, I can feel the emotion run through every word.. great write.
Yours Faithfully,
Jenny x

[E.V. Black]

The rhyming beat is a little off and there are some words that should be capitlized that aren't. Otherwise, I don't see anything wrong with it. t's pretty good. :D

[Jibin]

This is too good dear friend, a powerful view you penned here. Such a haunting and real thoughts i must say, and i love it's flow. In many way i can relate to it. Thanks for the post.
:)

This is a powerful poem. Very pointed and sending a message as well as advice. I would be curios, how much has changed in the two years since it's first posting?

[Sukriti Suki]

This is nice..Very nice. Some very deep dark lines in there..'Things you have said made them bleed'....amazing. I really liked this.

[A Risen Heroine.]

I really love this piece!
I know how you feel though..
Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing.

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Lily Mae]

You described that brokenness very well.. They say once broken that when you do rebuild it's more solid then ever.. I hope those things for you..xx

[DareToDream]

wow this was heavy, I could feel it all almost, you really did a great job conveying the feelings to the reader. a beautiful poem!

[Liz Alexander]

I like it. Our pain is all different. I dont know why people say they understand. You never can understand unless you are that person. I love it!