How The Broken Feel (Nobody Knows)

How The Broken Feel (Nobody Knows)

A Poem by LivingDeath
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My first write i put up... Revised it and changed it up a bit. Tell me what you think.

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Nobody knows the pain I feel
the wounds on my body are painfully real,
but the pain I feel i will not show
because nobody will care, so why should they know.
The cuts on my wrists are red and deep 
but the things you've said have made them bleed,
a simple I'm sorry cannot mend my heart
this depressing time will leave its mark.
I'm sorry for the grief i have brought 
but now you know I can't be bought,
and the pain I feel I will not show
for nobody will care, so why should they know.
Nobody will know the pain I feel 
and these wounds you've caused 
they will not heal.
for this is life and this is real....
This is how the broken feel.

© 2011 LivingDeath


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I am a huge fan of depressing writes. This was extremely deep, dark, and meaningful. I like the flow of it and the rhyming was perfect. It's emotion was grand and as I read it, I felt as though I could feel the pain. I truly do love this poem. It's one of the greatest dark writes I've read. :)

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Posted 15 Years Ago


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I have to agree... "For this is life and this is real, this is how the broken feel."

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is really good, I can feel the emotion run through every word.. great write.
Yours Faithfully,
Jenny x

Posted 13 Years Ago


The rhyming beat is a little off and there are some words that should be capitlized that aren't. Otherwise, I don't see anything wrong with it. t's pretty good. :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


Compartment 114
Compartment 114
Charlie
Fly the plane
This is too good dear friend, a powerful view you penned here. Such a haunting and real thoughts i must say, and i love it's flow. In many way i can relate to it. Thanks for the post.
:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is a powerful poem. Very pointed and sending a message as well as advice. I would be curios, how much has changed in the two years since it's first posting?

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is nice..Very nice. Some very deep dark lines in there..'Things you have said made them bleed'....amazing. I really liked this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I really love this piece!
I know how you feel though..
Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing.

~A Fallen Heroine~

Posted 13 Years Ago


You described that brokenness very well.. They say once broken that when you do rebuild it's more solid then ever.. I hope those things for you..xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


wow this was heavy, I could feel it all almost, you really did a great job conveying the feelings to the reader. a beautiful poem!

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Posted 14 Years Ago


I like it. Our pain is all different. I dont know why people say they understand. You never can understand unless you are that person. I love it!

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Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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