Falling Away

Lyrical rhythm and rhyme

Falling Away

LivingDeath

Hold on now

As we’re falling away

We’re two lost souls

Fading into the grey

Take my hand

As we’re falling away

Getting lost in the miles

Gonna find a new day

 

It started in November

Now Septembers almost here

And I’m trying to remember

All the seconds in a year,

Its cryptic how depicted

They can mimic all I fear

But each second is a minute

In this gimmick we adhere

 

We admire whats conspired

But retire what we feel

Rewired with desires

That transpire to be real,
It is mythic how conflicted

We’re predicted to conceal

I’m addicted and afflicted

Yet restricted to appeal

(so)

Hold on now

As we’re falling away

We’re two lost souls

Fading into the grey

Take my hand

As we’re falling away

Getting lost in the miles

On our way to be saved;

(so)

Hold on now

As we’re falling away

We’re two lost souls

Fading into the grey

Take my hand

As we’re falling away

Getting lost in the miles

Gonna find a new day

Each dream was so obscene

My esteem was in a trial

I believe that we’d succeed

Disagree against denial,

So defile my survival

While my smiles versatile

I will file my exile

With the highest percentile

 

I will leave this constitution

The confusion and unease

For illusion and seclusion

Substituted reveries,

I’ll pursue your higher power
Never lose our memories

I’m amused by your adieu

While abused by history

 

But if you bet just for a second

I would wreck the way I feel

I’d expect to be rejected

Still respecting what is real,

I’d elect my imperfections

True reflections unrevealed

To collect the new perceptions

That your weapons couldn’t steal

(so)

Hold on now

As we’re falling away

We’re two lost souls

Fading into the grey

Take my hand

As we’re falling away

Getting lost in the miles

On our way to be saved;

(so)

Hold on now

As we’re falling away

We’re two lost souls

Fading into the grey

Take my hand

As we’re falling away

Getting lost in the miles

Gonna find a new day

 

So elude my curiosities

Imbued by virtuosity

Exclude my animosities  

Ensued by this atrocity,  

Renewed within ferocity

Decrepitude philosophies

Delude your generosity

With devalued ambiguity

 

This equality is probably

An odysseys hypocrisy

Precautious little prodigies

Responsible anomalies,

It’s honestly that flawlessly

Honesty is quality

Modesty is consciously

Solitary constantly

(so)

Hold on now

As we’re falling away

We’re two lost souls

Fading into the grey

Take my hand

As we’re falling away

Getting lost in the miles

On our way to be saved;

(so)

Hold on now

As we’re falling away

We’re two lost souls

Fading into the grey

Take my hand

As we’re falling away

Getting lost in the miles

Gonna find a new day

 

Author's Note

Please Review!!

Reviews

[EssenceofDaringx]

This. Was. Amazing! The rhythm was so...smooth yet syncopated. The flow of this piece flowed so well, it was a thing of art. I know it's a lyrical poem, but this truly sounded like a song. Like I could see someone like 21 pilots performing this. this was brilliant and if you couldn't tell by now, I'm thoroughly impressed. Please, don't ever stop doing what you're doing. Thanks for sharing and happy writing!

[Asma]

I literally loved this poem, just wow !!! Keep up

[R.E.K.]

it was like reading something that fell from heaven.....deep and yet left me feeling lighter

[Valentine]

This left me thinking of my husband that God took home 3 years ago. Life just fell away and was gone. Valentine

[Ossi]

Wow, From the first sentence I couldn't stop, it drew me in like a great song. I could feel the melody and feel the meaning of what was being told, it really captivated me. Great work!

[Color of the Iris]

Okay, first... I simply adore your rhyme scheme and how it's so rhythmically in sync. Each line practically flows into the next giving it a very forward motion and it keeps the reader interested! I also loved how each word is so strategically placed that it makes the lyrics sort of dark, but bouncy, lol. Like an Alice in Wonderland type of feel, like you know you're different, but you don't care. I don't know if that makes sense, but it does to me. :)

Second, it was so dark and almost had a sort of rebellious feel to it. Kind of like you know you're going down a different road and were telling all those who felt like they needed to put their two cents in to f*ck off almost, lol. I myself felt like this could have easily been a Nirvana, or Nine Inch Nails song. Very well structured, amazing flow, and the meaning behind the lyrics are spot on. I really enjoyed this! Keep it up! And thank you for the read request! :)

[Tessa Melendez]

Wow. So rhythmic. When I heard it in my head, it sounded like it had the rhythm of a Jack Skellington song or the rhythm that is included in I Write Sins Not Tragedies by Panic! At the Disco. Shoot. It could be a song. The word play, the rhyme, the language...it's a beautiful piece. I applaud you.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the journey and the thoughts in the poem.
"Take my hand
As we’re falling away
Getting lost in the miles
On our way to be saved;"
Hard to save a dying wish. I liked the above lines. Sadness and hope in the same sentence. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry my friend.
Coyote

[Nessly]

Beautiful write. Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed reading.