Strangers at beginning )Chapther 1)

This is my Fanfiction about Shawn Mendes, hope you'll enjoy!

I was running late for my train, last minute i still got it.
All out of breath I sat down to a young man about age 15-20, I couldn't really see his face cause he had a hoodie and sunglasses on, it was kinda weird but I also dress like this at home so I didn't really care.
After about 30 minutes he started talking to me "Hey, what are you writing?" he asked "Oh nothing important, don't worry about it" I said kinda shy. "Can I see it please?" he asked like a little kid asking for candy "uh.. sure" I said.
After he was finished with reading he took of his sunglasses, I was really shook cause it turned out that I'm sitting next to Shawn Mendes, "It looks like you're writing a Song it's really good!" he said, I was really happy and shooked about his words so all I said was "Oh thank you but it's not that good I just wrote it cause I was bored, sometimes I just write some random songs for myself", "Btw I'm Shawn Peter Raul Mendes!" "Nice to meet you Shawn, I'm Summer Rider!" I said brought him to smile "Also nice to meet you Summer, do you also sing or play any instroments?" he said staring at me intressted "Uhm yeah I do sing in the shower and I play some instroments" I was really blushing while i said that "Uh.. I play Guitar, piano, etc." I added. " wow nice!"
He was really nice and we talked for about 1 hour untill he said "I have to go now but it was really nice to meet you mrs.Rider!" "Also nice to meet you mr.Mendes" I said, before he left he gave me a card with his number, I stared at it for like 5 minutes smiling, then I noticed that he was already gone, I put the card in my bagpag and begon to write another song cause I already was bored again but also I was really happy cause who ever met Shawn and talked with him for 1 hour and becomes his freaking number?
I felt so happy like i never ever did. After 30 min I got out of the train and ran home, it was a long day at my friends house, but I didn't want to tell my parents that I just met Shawn Mendes or even my siblings, cause they love him and they akways get what they wanted so this was my time to have fun and not being the useless child at home but I did tell my best friend about it, she don't really like him but she was really happy for me.
It was always my dream to sing on stage but I'm also really shy to sing in front of thousends of people! But I knew that I can do it, I am ready for this.
The next day I was kind of nervous to text him but I ended up texting him this *Hey Shawn, it was really fun talking to you yesterday, hope we can meet each other again someday* and about 2 hours later a got a message back from him that says *Hello Summer, I also found it really funny yesterday with you, you are a really nice girl and I tought that we could meet today again if you want!* I was so happy so I wrote *Yeah sure when and where you wanna meet mister Mendes?*
*How about in 1 houre in Köln, I just pick you up!*
As I got out of the train I was looking around to find Shawn as somebody took my arm and brang me to a bus and it was Goeff a friend from Shawn "Sorry for not saying anything but Shawn told me to pick you up because of his fans! And sorry if you got scared!" He said "Nah its fine! Nice to meet you, my name is Summer" "I'm Goeff!", "AND I'M ANDREW!!!" he shout out, I had to laugh because of his fish face he made while saying it. Few minutes later Shawn got in the bus "Sorry for being late Summer!" "It's fine Shawn, Geoff and Andrew are really funny!" 
After 2 hours I think Shawn said "Summer can I talk to you for a bith?" "Yeah sure.." I said while walking with him out of the bus "Sooo whats the matter?" I said pretending to be cool bring him to smile, "I really want you to sing a song for me, your own songs!" he said really intressted "Shawn I can't, I never sang in front of someone cause i'm shy and I really don't like to be juged" I was looking down while saying that, a tear ran down my cheek and as Shawn noticed that he pulled me closer to give me a hug "I'm sorry Summer I didn't want to make you cry!" he whispered in my ear "It's not you Shawn it's me, I'm just a loser" I said still crying, "You are not a loser how could you say this?" he asked "By meaning it!" "I better go now" I added as I ran away from him to the next train home, as I sat down I could see Shawns sad face "I'm sorry" I wisphered and the train drove away.

Author's Note

should I continue with the chapter? Yes or No?

Reviews

[Trajan]

Would Shawn Mendes say his full name to strangers? Anyway, don't leave things unfinished. If you aim to continue writing, here's my simple starting and parting advice. Dialogue, just make it easier for your readers to follow:
"Sorry for not saying anything but Shawn told me to pick you up because of his fans!" he said. "And sorry if you got scared!"
"Nah its fine! Nice to meet you, my name is Summer"
"I'm Goeff!"
"AND I'M ANDREW!!!" came the shout. I had to laugh because of his fish face he made while saying it
New dialogue is spaced like a new paragraph. So that would make your life easier and the reader's life easier.
Hope this feedback helps you, moving forward.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Once you start - you need to finish! But remember to treat all this as a first draft. I find an edit or more when rereading my writes helps to strengthen the composition. :-)