Set Me Free, Insanity

Reflect a perfect mirage -

I want the miracle

Of an empty mind

For knowing is the worst of plagues

Repel the shadows dancing in the dark

Chasing cranes and hollow eyes

The dictators of paranoia sold my soul

Right back to me

And then they made me watch

The elation of those heretic fears

Soulless within, my glory is

Knowing that if I still am

I won’t forever be.

 

Every day there’s still another day - why?

Every time I see murder all around 

Surrounded by mouths wrapped into lies

I’d like to scream ‘war is over’

But I’m afraid it’s just began

Won’t run, can’t ride -

Mute all the human machines,

And please, make them all forget me

(Beauty and I shall break all the mirrors together)

I’d like to love, could you introduce me to it?

I've never seen beyond ink and paper

Can’t feel love, can’t reach love

Christ - I don't feel anything at all

Just let me go

Blindness shall cover me entirely

Like a giant white cloud of light

Then I’ll rise

Reviews

[Revolutionary]

This poem reminded me of a blind model I met once.She fell off a truck during a photo shoot hit her head lost her sight and she told me somthing profound.
She said."When I could see I found someone pleasing to look at and I would want to see into there mind.Now that I' m blind I find someone's mind pleasing and then I want to touch their face"
She was still extremely beautiful,but she didn't know it anymore.
Your poem is well written,but they all are.You have alot of talent or I wouldn't bother to read anymore.I only keep reading if I think it might be good and you never disappoint me.

[Sheri]

I enjoyed reading this! very deep and true,good job!

[trainwreck]

I love this! Thank you for sharing this with me.

[Richard Williams]

This is very fine, interesting and of emotional impact.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

"Like a giant white cloud of light

Then I'll rise".

You put so much passion into this poem, I can see your soul bursting through your words, absolutely fantastic poem.

[Karina Longo]

@Shelby, unfortunately (or not), I don't use any editing systems. I don't write in word processors either. English is not even my first speaking language to be honest. I have that old-fashioned style of writing, thinking, replacing some sentences, eventually noticing some mistakes (and sometimes I do get some advices as well!), thinking some more, rewriting this and that, etc. I do encourage people to edit their works though. It doesn't matter how - but it should be done, you're so right. :)
Thanks for your rich, interesting review!

[howlfjdks]

This is my favorite line, "Surrounded by mouths wrapped into lies" this is so true, honesty is rare.

[Shelby]

I love that you use italics to get across different stresses. It really makes the reading of your work more dynamic and interesting. Your wording is very well done too. You don't just say "I've never been in love", which is a common sentiment in poems, you say:

I’d like to love, could you introduce me to it?
I've never seen beyond ink and paper
Can’t feel love, can’t reach love
Christ - I don't feel anything at all

You play with phrases and wording, which gives you depth and makes the poem sound much more intelligent. You write beautifully, and I was just wondering: what is your editing system? You never have misspelled words or awkward phrases. That's rare to find, especially on this sight. Do you write it in word processor or something? Because if you do, or do something like it, I will ask that when you review people and find lots of mistakes, advise them to do that. I'm trying to get across the importance of editing to the new writers, and you apparently edit, which makes your work more enjoyable to read and gives me a reason to go deeper in my evaluations. I loved this poem and thank you for asking me to read it. And I apologize that I've gone AWOL lately. Please continue read requesting me, and I'll catch up eventually.

[Coyote Poetry]

"I’d like to scream ‘war is over’
But I’m afraid it’s just began
Won’t run, can’t ride -
Mute all the human machines,
And please, make them all forget me"
The poem is more then amazing. I could discuss each point with you. I know the feeling of feeling weak and useless. I have children who must live in a world that know only war and hate. I can't do a damn thing. I like how you ended the poem. Thank you you and your poetry. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Kyla H]

Very nicely done, makes me think of my self-image

[Lilly Negoi]

i think the first stanza could very well stand up as a poem in itself..."ignorance is bliss" - perfectly illustrated!