The Furthest Part Of Me

Collaboration with Rossen. :)

Suffocated through all the fever and flame
From all the nights we had, they were not so bad
Can you really say, d'ya truly wanna stay
Do you really wanna know, the way I'm gonna go
Do you still see the furthest part of me

Give something new, another piece of you

Girl you take me down to my pain
Please leave me alone,
C'mon save me a bone

Got to have a little of my time...

She always kicked off her shoes on my side
I see her dancing to tunes on long bike rides
While I remember her hands -
running through my hair
At the end of the day

Me I forgot all the times that she saved me
From all the beat downs that life gave me
She was my guiding light
in the middle of night or day

Carried my weight when I needed
Took me back when I cheated
Oh, she loved me so deeply
So why did I treat her that way

Her picture sits in my mind,
Killing my hope for a lifetime
I've seen my freebird flyin' away
When all I wanted was to ask her to stay

Reviews

[iamkim]

Wonderful Karina! You never fail to impress me with your words :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

What a beautiful poem/song. I could actually hear this set to music. Beautiful imagery and great flow.. my fave lines:

I've seen my freebird flyin' away
When all I wanted was to ask her to stay

[trainwreck]

This was absolutely beautiful. I love that.

[sushi]

My favorite line was "Suffocated through all the fever and flame
From all the nights we had, they were not so bad".

I liked this write a lot.... beautiful said...

[Seshat Nidaba]

My favorite line was "Do you still see the furthest part of me". I read it as really good song lyrics and that's rare to find. Also, I like you.

[Jess.]

Love it. Beautiful!

[Shalini Dinesh]

she will come back flying to you when you are reading to open your heart, mind and soul....

[Emily B]

it's a wonderful song!!!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Both have done well ; )