A Few Months Are Several Days

A Few Months Are Several Days

A Poem by Karina Longo
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Lovey-dovey lyrics. Read 'Writer's Note'.

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When the dawn breaks in
I forget my name and who I am
So shallow within,
They call me Hollow Man.

It's been like Spring without
blossoming, a day without sparkle
My life's a broken tape
Colour fading and silent voices
I can only hear the empty noises

I think I know - something is missing
My heart's metalic-crimson,
All cold, slightly diseased
And the melting cure is always you.
You say, 'It's not that bad
I'll be back someday,
It's maybe just a few months,
I'll be there, so wait'

But a few months are several days
What does it take to kill inside
What's meant to live in pain?
A few months can change history
So how could I know if in a few months
You'd still want to come and live with me?

In a few months you'll miss my birthday
In a few months the Spring and heat are over
In a few months there won't be today
These holy tears will dry,
the uniqueness will fade away

Insecure and paranoid, shivering like a dog
Clingy wirey boy, dazed and confused
They say I just keep mumbling cliches
But is it really hard to see

That a few months are several days
Each second of my life I'm loving you
So it's a real long way
But even if a few months are several days
All I can say, is
You know you're worth the wait.

© 2011 Karina Longo


Author's Note

Karina Longo
Lovey-dovey LYRICS. It's not a poem, it's a lyric. It's a simple portrait of a young man's anxiety and fear of losing his loved one.

P.S.: It's quite 'teeny', I know. But it's written from the perspective of a teenager boy.

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I really liked this piece. Well structured and overall
good lyrics.
I felt like the beginning was very strong and colored with lovely metaphors whereas a little towards the end I felt it got a bit weaker. I think if you went back and revised it, this piece would be incredible

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love to hear this kind of work, you are smooth and deep...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nicely done once again :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is lovely! This would make a wondeful song.


Posted 13 Years Ago


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I read this as someone who has built their entire world around this love. He says he understands that time flies by so fast but still he feels empty......Well penned

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