Dear Joe

A letter, an advice, one last goodbye before letting you go and face the world.

(Well maybe I’m wrong but I don’t care)

 

Dear Joe,

before you go - don’t turn your back

and take your bag away

I’ll have to make you stay; see

The world ain’t spinnin’ round you

The world’s just spinnin’ fast

And we’re so young and old

 

Dear Joe,

remember that people are cold

They won’t even say a word of compassion

Don’t carry your distraction of

think that everything

is a mirror of yourself

It brokes and may won’t fix very well

The secret is to just let it flow

 

Oh but before you take your bag away

I gotta make you stay

and make you understand that -

The world ain’t spinnin’ round you

the world’s just spinnin’ fast

However, not everything is a bless

Keep your eyes open before you run -

We're always right and wrong

 

My dear Joe,

remember that people are bold

They will say whatever they

need to - win the fight - and make you

lose yr sight

So don't carry your distraction of think

that everything is a mirror of yourself

It brokes and may won’t fix very well

The way is just to keep it strong

 

Maybe I’m just too young,

Oh, maybe I could be wrong

Or maybe I’m just too old

But those words should have been told -

to you dear Joe.

Author's Note

A letter, an advice, one last goodbye before letting you go and face the world.
(Lyrical poem)

Reviews

Absolutely agree with Neva and Rikkevi .... very powerful poem .. though ideally you could have thrown in some positive points as well .. but then again , the ideal is not always realistic .. what you have written here is very realistic .. parents do this all the time ..
great work !! 100/100

[LovelySparrow]

Very songlike. I found that this piece was very realistic, you definetly caught the emotion in this piece. Wonderful job!

[trainwreck]

This was pretty cool! I really like the lyrical nature of it.

[Shiningwolf]

This could make into a song.

[iamkim]

I can't express what I really feel with my voice. But I can write it down with my mind. This poem is wonderful! It is so close to my heart :) Thanks for sharing Karina!

[Stef Outsiders]

WOW...!!
This is soo good, sad but good... I write letters if i can't say it face to face... so i can relate...

[Sunni Davis]

very lyrical indeed. I could hear the music around this as I read the words. Its such a sorrowful goodbye but very well written.

[Dream Weaver]

The equivalent to a dear John letter, I think
there’s nothing more devastating then getting
a letter of goodbye and farewell and not being
able to do it face to face…A true sadness to
end a relationship with paper and pen..

[howlfjdks]

I definitely like the parts about the mirror and that the world does not revolve around you.

[Patches I'm not so new..]

I like this it has a lyrical lilt to it. This is a song one would sing to close departing friend

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This would make a beautiful song.
I believe we have a hit.