Dead Girl Walking (Orange Flavoured Pills)

Lyrical poems. About vice and emptiness.

Give me those pills

Blessed orange flavoured pills

So it can feel

Easier to breath

 

The world is a tiny

Tiny creepy broken toy

And I am just the pieces

Of what have been destroyed

 

Leave me alone

‘Cos people don’t make me feel

Anything that I could possibly feel

People, oh, they make me feel sick

They’re a perfect mix of

The seven deadly sins and

 

I’m the dead girl walking

Through your hypocrite dreams at night

I am the despair and I am all the laughs

You laughed when you were meant to cry

The dead girl walking through

These cold empty streets

I’m a sad unknown song

A soul with no needs

 

‘Cos I’m dead now

As the world falls apart

I feel dead now

While the kids play in the merry-go-round

They smile but they don’t know why

I cry and I don’t know why

 

Just give me some

Orange flavoured pills

So I can feel it

A little easier to breath

While I’m still here

Author's Note

Lyrical poem about vice and emptiness.

Reviews

[Brook]

This is fantastic. I identify with it a lot, actually. Though I've stopped abusing my medications, this reminds me of that time of my life. And I'm still identify a lot with these lines...

I am the despair and I am all the laughs
You laughed when you were meant to cry

Maybe I just have a dark, twisty sense of humor, but a lot of the time my jokes end up making people feel uncomfortable because they're dark or morbid. I saw that reflected in those lines and thought that the lines themselves were very clever. It definitely paints a picture of someone dead, who has a very different view from the orthodox perspective on something grim. It's eerie, but thoroughly enjoyable from a reading standpoint. A++

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

something to numb the pain of existing as the world goes by and leaves us behind.........excellent

[Richard Williams]

You captured those feeling well, I like the mix of the seven deadly sins and "hypocrite dreams." Well felt.

[Rikkevi Rue]

there are many facets to pain, whether emotional or physical...or even mental. Depiction of pain is to me difficult, because one has to be willing to experience it in a degree to portray it, and since you do it so well you must have lived it to some degree. It isn't just "the world-wise experienced author" writing about their travails, rather the artist who has the temerity to make aesthetics out of it. You are blossoming my dear and there is a maturity to what you write...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

striking emotional piece relating the devastation of the human volition for being alive~ for there is a vast difference between life and being alive!~ powerful!

[Midnight_Mystery]

loved it! nicely done :) you cant help but feel her emotion

[Angela]

Such a depth of sadness. Lyrical and well thought out as always. "You laughed when you were meant to cry" Intense line that makes the poem for me.

[trainwreck]

Lyrical poetry is difficult to do correctly, but this was a great job. Honestly, I really enjoyed it. It definately draws you in, and I love it when poetry does that.

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dark and dramatic..and with an emptiness that compels the reader through your poem..strong stuff..

[Pebbles]

brilliant ... really felt this