Sanitized

Out of my comfort zone,

Disintegrating

A solar dream, near their origami-made,

Ice thin standards

 

Out of breath, sinking in fresh air -

Freedom out of my cage,

It makes me feel like I am living

Someone else’s perfect dream

 

Kill her again, and again

So she will not feel like

Placing herself six feet under

 

Kill her again, and again

So she will fit in

This wonderful, sanitized disaster

 

Her black hair -

Already drowned

In her own

Insane wonders 

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

Finding your own way of placing words is magically insane. Seems nobody else will ever use your pen.. you are its owner.. always will be. Self taught, unique, factually yours. Words to read a second time.. or more:

'Out of breath, sinking in fresh air -
Freedom out of my cage,
It makes me feel like I am living
Someone else’s perfect dream'

[HadesRising]

Very creative and imaginative. Well Done.

[Karina Longo]

Thank you so much!

[Rob Santana]

Three words came to my mind when I read this. Eccentric, creative and original. This is a fresh read for me. Possibly because it's How I write, let's just say similar style, haha, or maybe not. Either way I really like this piece. Good job.

[JC]

very intriguing, like a late night beneath a yellow hue you tell us your world and your anger and fever and need for freedom.

[The Twin Arenas]

the last stanza is great/

[rach]

wow, I don't even know what to say, I loved reading this!