The Game

When will it be over?

The milky white dice are rolled.

My tarnished silver pawn is moved.

Plastic houses settle on properties.

Paper money offers are gambled.

Income is not ensured

When passing through “Go.”

The banker psychiatrist

Deals the currency medication

And sells estates advice.

Chaos resides

In circulation.

When will The Game end?

I’m tired of playing.

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Author's Note

Hope you enjoyed the reading. Any and all criticism is appreciated. Take Care! Stay Strong! :)

Reviews

[I Am Svetlana]

Ah, Monopoly :) I like the relation you gave in this. But anyways, the game is a lot like life and how we live, when often, we are tired of playing over and over after awhile. The game gets old and we know what our next moves are going to be, know what advice the psychiatrist will give us next and what we are told to give up in order for a proper recovery. We know all the rules, know every move, shouldn't we have won by now? It should have been as easy as slicing a piece of cake, but not as difficult as moving bricks.

[Carole L]

beautiful, so clever

[Blue Belle]

Thank you so much! :) Yeah, from the start, I've always thought of struggling with mental illness was like a game.

[Zap-the-awesome]

Once again, great work. I like the...monopoly reference? I think that's right. I don't play board games alot.

[Blue Belle]

Thank you. Yes, it is a reference to monopoly.

[Vria P Crow]

Dear Blue Belle,


INTRODUCTION

1. The vocabulary is:

(1) Colorful
(2) Beautiful
(3) Sweet

THE GRAMMAR QUEEN

"The milky, white dice are rolled.
My tarnished silver pawn is moved.

As I read the first line out loud, I felt awkward. Honestly, I felt it tampered with the flow. However, here is the good news; poetry does not "need" punctuation. In addition, this is the only problem I had with the "flow."

CONTENT

FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE & VOCABULARY I ENJOY

1. "Milky"
2. silver pawn
3. plastic houses

FORMAT & INTERPRETATION

1. I am a little confused as to why you crossed out the word "banker." However, that is the fault of mine, not yours.

2. I love how you related the generic quality of the "board game" and "life."

3. I love how you use the blank line to emphasize objectively.

CONCLUSION

FAVORITE QUOTE:

"The banker psychiatrist
Deals the currency medication"

Primarily, I connect to this line because I related it to the most.

ADVICE:

1. Educate yourself.
2. Be yourself.
3. Love yourself.

Love,

Ria

[Blue Belle]

Thanks so much for the elaborate review!

[Vria P Crow]

You are very welcome:D Your poetry speaks to me, dearie! :D

[Luke Rawlings]

The imagery to this made my mind go "Woahhh". A really good read, you capture the idea of drug monopoly very well! The structure helps it pack that emotional punch too, a good write :D

[Blue Belle]

Thanks! :)

[PurpleQuartz]

Great write

[Blue Belle]

Thanks

[Alone In A Crowd]

This is a great poem and I understand your concept. Your vocabulary and choice of words are great and put an image that flows around my head. Great peom, keep it up

[Blue Belle]

Thanks you! :)

[Rahul]

well, if such kinda game i had to play then i'd love to be tried more by this game. nicely written,
great job and thoughts're on game're powerful.

[Chris]

Hi, hell of a "game" isn't it? And it seems there is nothing that's fair except for the people who want to be and consciously try.

[zainul]

All transactions in life may be like this game.
Getting tired of life's activities but no way to leave.

[Blue Belle]

:)

[zainul]

:)