Porcelain

Poem about the battle between internal and external beauty.

Pale china face, smooth as silk

The surface unflawed, pristine

Whiter than white, pure as angel's breath

Cheeks rounded as if holding sweet charms

Skin more like bone china than flesh.

A glow almost there, lighted from the inside.

Seems like she'd be cold to touch

More material than real.

Ivory-faced, rose lipped

Like kisses bestowed forever tender.

Pursed and pouted, naturally cushioning

Shaped so daintily, like half-bloomed flowers.

Long dark lashes fanning shades softer than down

Over her peach-kissed cheeks.

Eyes so wide and dark

Like drops of melted chocolate.

Warm and safe, glowing but not from within

Wide eyes that catch all external light

Necessary to combat the lack within;

Casting an illusion.

 

But porcelain is fragile

Moreso than it seems.

Such beauty denotes such inner strength

Sitting atop the world.

And yet, to look closely,

Her posture upon the throne

Is as lifeless as a collector's doll

Made of her very soul.

No one can notice the hairline crack

That courses over her chest

Tracing its line so deeply

Even while nondescript.

Forever entombed within herself

Too scared to show herself as real.

Wanting the world to see past her exterior

And see, instead, her real self.

Almost inhuman on the outside

Too human within.

If she does not merge the two

And become the happy medium

The crack will surely deepen

And pierce right through her heart.

 

She encompasses all that makes us

Our truer fears and hopes.

Why do we limit ourselves

To see only one type of beauty at a time?

 

You have outer, I have inner

No, instead we all have both.

Too concerned are we

With our subtle cracks in self

That instead of appreciating

Ourselves as a whole

We merely make the cracks deeper

By examining and exaggeration.

 

Accept the gifts--and blemishes--

Within and on yourself.

Learn to love all about you

Rather than obsess over the wrongs.

Both good and bad create us,

But people forsake the first.

Everything within you IS you

And should be loved for such.

If one does not accept this fact

Then the cracks would surely deepen.

 

You'll shatter yourself into dust

And learn that porcelain breaks.

 

 

Tuesday 02.11.10

Author's Note

I wrote this in a lunchtime at college. I'm worried that it waffles on a bit or repeats itself. Please let me know what you think, any suggestions for improvements to be made et cetera.

Reviews

[Ellen Hammond]

This says a lot about the only way to be really happy. We need to learn to love ourselves and be comfortable enough to share the our inner selves with others. You may have a bit of repetition in this write, but it drives home the message. Nice work!

[Toni Blackerby]

i love this so much

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Thank you! I'm so pleased you enjoy it :)

[Toni Blackerby]

ur welcome

[I Shred This Cabbage]

wonderful! :)

it grips on to a descriptive force and doesn't let go.

loved the line,
You have outer, I have inner
No, instead we all have both.

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Thank you very much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it :)

[I Shred This Cabbage]

no problem :) i really did enjoy it :) very lyrical and beauteous :)

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Well that is an honour! Thank you :D

[Alistair (Ali)]

I would have to say that was a very constructive lunchtime! Well done!
Are you familiar with the film "Brightstar?"

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Well thank you ^.^ And no, I'm not. Did my piece remind you of it?

[Alistair (Ali)]

The Romantic style and your name hints of Victorian Romanticism!..and it is a beautiful film!..I have to say I squeezed a few tears myself!

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Ah, I see! Well, thank you. Perhaps I should check it out :)

[Jade-UH]

I love it. The flow is peaceful. It reminds me of a friend, and some things we've been through. It's kind of lengthy but the description is well worth it. Good job.

[kayla]

I love this. I like the message within it, and it makes complete sense(:

[Michael X]

the insight of a false illusion, the depth preceeds depth, the descriptions
work to create the emotionasl tie that binds the meaning to personal
reflection giving way to excperience, this is a stunning- stuble poem, wow.

[Balance]

Pale china face, smooth as silk

But porcelain is fragile
Moreso than it seems.
Such beauty denotes such inner strength

Such beautiful lines

[Crazy Cat Man]

Yes be proud of your Porcelain skin. We should all embrace what we were born with. I might write a piece about my brown skin :) love it

[A.Lee]

I think this is absolutely amazing. Very insightful and really makes the reader think...

I loved this line:
"She encompasses all that makes us
Our truer fears and hopes.
Why do we limit ourselves
To see only one type of beauty at a time?"

Great work.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. The description and detail made the words come alive. So many strong lines.
"Forever entombed within herself
Too scared to show herself as real."
A outstanding poem. This is the kind of poem I would want to read again.
Coyote